Risk management

MD ZULKAR NAYEN (46527133) Task1

by Zulkar Nayen

Submission date: 07-Apr-2020 03:17PM (UTC+1000) Submission ID: 1291698511 File name: 307302_Zulkar_Nayen_MD_ZULKAR_NAYEN__46527133___Task1_5556225_1018621035.docx (20.78K) Word count: 1240 Character count: 6830

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FINAL GRADE

6/20 MD ZULKAR NAYEN (46527133) Task1 GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Zulkar,

I strongly suspect you are going to be very disappointed in your mark. Read my comments on your paper for more specific feedback.

You had the basis for a good paper but a number of things let you down.

You didnt answer the first part of the question at all! Dont know why? You needed to be far more specific and you needed far more academic support for you claims. You must be specific. The points you had, I understood what you were getting at but I cant give you marks if you dont tell me. Generalisations are just that generalisations. The 3 references you had were good and relevant to that specific sentence but far to few. The paper read well and was easy to follow in that respect so well done.

As I mentioned in my email to you. Please send messages to me in ilearn and second, I am not able to give extensions. You need to go through the formal process.

Finally and this is the most important point I want to make, please do not take my comments as destructive but constructive. Im here to make you a better writer and critical thinker. My comments are in no way intended to be malicious or hurtful.

Kind regards Vince

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Comment 1

Z, this is good but, part 1 asked for an actual risk rating. I havent see it yet?

Comment 2

Z, totally agree but, where is your academic support for all or some of this?

Comment 3

what safety measures???

Comment 4

what operations? I have no idea what you mean here Z??

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Comment 5

again Z. I agree but, you have no academic support.

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Comment 6

Z, what are the, 'various limitations?' What are the unambiguously'..hazards

tell me. Tell the reader. These are motherhood statements that tell me nothing. Be specific. I cant read your mind. If you dont tell me I cant give you a mark for it. '

Motherhood statements Don't use motherhood statements as they don't really tell me what it is you are actually, specifically tell me what it is you are getting to or saying. Generalisations are just that, general. I can not give you a mark if you dont tell me what the actually example or issue is.

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Comment 7

Z, again. I agree but where is your academic support for all this? What do these generalisations mean????

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needs to be correctly referenced Z

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YES! MORE OF THIS SUPPORT!!

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Comment 11

such as what??

Comment 12

Z, again. You must support or claims. What does all this actually mean?

Comment 13

what resources? You havent been specific and told me of any

Comment 14

good support but, what might valueless data be??

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RUBRIC: HAMPDEN BRIDGE

PART 2 (1) (25%)

HIGH DISTINCTION (20)

DISTINCTION (16)

CREDIT (13)

PASS (10)

FAIL (0)

RESEARCH (30%)

HIGH DISTINCTION (20)

DISTINCTION (16)

CREDIT (13)

PASS (10)

FAIL (0)

RA SYNTAX (10%)

0 / 20

0 / 20

Response to "How was completing the RMM helpful in evaluating the risk faced by the HB?" Degree to which level of academic research was applied and integrated. Evidence is appropriate.

Outstanding integration of wide range of evidence and all points are substantiated by primary resources

Excellent integration of evidence into material and primary sources used to support most points

Most points are supported by third party evidence

Some points are used but only of a basic nature

Little or no use of evidence to support content requirements

0 / 20

Degree to which level of academic research was applied and integrated. Evidence is appropriate.

Demonstrates a sophisticated engagement with the current literature, correctly identifying both the arguments that support the position taken, and successfully addressing concerns raised by different or opposing views. All sources are current and valid. Diverse sources directly relevant to the topic, including refereed academic journals, books and reports.

Demonstrates a solid engagement with the literature and acknowledges the concerns raised by alternative positions in the literature. Some sources are less directly relevant to topic. Diverse sources directly relevant to the topic, including refereed academic journals, books and reports.

Demonstrates a “for and against” approach to the literature, with some attempt to integrate and address the difference between these positions. Sources are in general less directly relevant to topic. Diverse sources directly relevant to the topic, including refereed academic journals, books and reports..

Demonstrates some supportive academic literature, but does not account for the different positions of authors within the ongoing debate within the discipline. Sources are generally poorly selected. Diverse sources directly relevant to the topic, including refereed academic journals, books and reports.

The paper does not demonstrate engagement with the relevant literature. Sources are of marginal quality. Fewer independent sources (not including text book, study guide or course readings).

0 / 20

Syntax is correct, concise & clear and spelling is correct

HIGH DISTINCTION (20)

DISTINCTION (16)

CREDIT (13)

PASS (10)

FAIL (0)

RM DETERMINAT (5%)

HIGH DISTINCTION (20)

DISTINCTION (16)

CREDIT (13)

PASS (10)

FAIL (0)

RA WORD LIMIT (5%)

HIGH DISTINCTION (20)

DISTINCTION (16)

CREDIT (13)

PASS (10)

FAIL (0)

PART 2 (2) (25%)

Very few (if any) grammatical errors. The meaning of each sentence is always clear and easily understood.

Few grammatical errors. Mostly the meaning of what is written is clear

Some grammatical errors. Generally the meaning of what is written is clear.

Many grammatical errors. At times the meaning of what is written is affected by these errors.

Numerous grammatical errors are present, and this affects the ability to understand the meaning of what is said

0 / 20

Gave a Risk Management Matrix Determination

Included with rating

Included with rating

Included with rating

Included with rating

Not included

0 / 20

Word limit is adhered to +/- 10%

Meets word limit

Meets word limit

Meets word limit

Meets word limit

Does not meet word limit

0 / 20

HIGH DISTINCTION (20)

DISTINCTION (16)

CREDIT (13)

PASS (10)

FAIL (0)

Response to " What were the limitations of using the RMM?" Degree to which level of academic research was applied and integrated. Evidence is appropriate.

Outstanding integration of wide range of evidence and all points are substantiated by primary resources

Excellent integration of evidence into material and primary sources used to support most points

Most points are supported by third party evidence

Some points are used but only of a basic nature

Little or no use of evidence to support content requirements