Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 2: Solution and Advantages
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ENG 215 – Appendix A: Peer Review Feedback Form 1 |
Assignment 3: Persuasive Paper Part 1: A Problem Exists
Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. Follow these instructions:
1) Receive a classmate’s paper from your professor (in class if on-ground; by e-mail if online).
2) Copy the Peer Review Feedback Form from the Appendix.
3) Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form.
4) Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper to your professor.
Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor via the Assignment Tab in the course shell.
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Comments < Areas for Improvement |
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1. Provide an appropriate title and an interesting opening paragraph to appeal to your stated audience (appeal with logic, ethics, or emotion). |
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I am not sure if the topic is Outsourcing or Implications of Outsourcing. To what audience are you appealing too? |
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2. Include a defensible, relevant thesis statement in the first paragraph. (With revised thesis statement.) |
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The thesis appears not to include comparison that requires two or more items indicating to the reader what, when, how, or where. |
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3. Describe the history and status of the issue and provide an overview of the problem(s) that need to be addressed. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. |
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Not sure where to locate the history, status and overview of the issue. |
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4. Explain the first problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1- 2) paragraphs. |
The first problem was noted and support for the claim was provided. |
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5. Explain the second problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. |
The second problem was noted and support for the claim was provided. |
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6. Explain the third problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs. |
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I was not sure if there was a third problem noted and where to find claims to support the problem. |
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7. Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences throughout the paper. |
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There are issues with grammar, and the use of antecedents and passive words. |
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8. Provide a concluding paragraph that summarizes the stated problems and promises a solution. |
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The conclusion does not summarize what is noted in the thesis statement, nor does it promise a solution. |
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9. Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion |
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I had trouble identifying specific parts of the essay. |
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10. Support claims with at least three (3) quality, relevant references. Use credible, academic sources available through Strayer University’s Resource Center. |
References were noted and placed in alphabetical order. |
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11. Other |
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I was a little confused about whether your paper was stating problems with outsourcing or the benefits of outsourcing. |
