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Feedback for 5-6 Milestone One: Persuasive Essay Draft

Introduction: Thesis Statement

· Composes a thesis, but there are issues related to clarity or relevancy

· A thesis is not a list, though. See notes on doc. Make it one sentence.

Body: Opposing Viewpoints

· Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints, but not in a way that strengthens the argument

· I'm surprised you don't just liken the whole thing to handing someone who is depressed a gun, which would be negligent. Address the idea that it is compassionate, that it is an act of mercy.

Conclusion: Insights

· Articulates insights about argument established through the essay, but does not follow argument logically or does not refer to key points or quotes used to support claim

· Here you should really express an understanding of the other's sides position and restate your own key points, defeating them once and for all.