Research Paper and Works Cited Page

DraftResearchPaper by oluwatoyin owoade

Submission date: 04-Oct-2020 01:35PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1404786149 File name: www_moodle_temp_turnitintool_1768727370.DraftResearchPaper.docx (19.71K) Word count: 1396 Character count: 7826

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10% SIMILARITY INDEX

7% INTERNET SOURCES

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10% STUDENT PAPERS

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DraftResearchPaper ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to BPP College of Professional Studies Limited Student Paper

Submitted to Curtin University of Technology Student Paper

Submitted to Bridgepoint Education Student Paper

Submitted to Brickfields Asia College Student Paper

bizfluent.com Internet Source

Submitted to Central Queensland University Student Paper

Submitted to University of Central Florida Student Paper

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FINAL GRADE

16/20 DraftResearchPaper GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Hello Oluwayoyin,

Revise the essay for a complete and precise thesis.

Bring the content in sync with the main idea.

Focus on the summary of a body paragraph that ends with a citation.

Also, work on the punctuation and formatting errors to make the writing smoother.

Cite the documents in the MLA format precisely.

AL.

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welcome Hi! I am your grader, and it is a pleasure to review your paper today! - AL.

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date in MLA | Format

Write the date in the MLA format.

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Additional Comment

15 March 2020

Comment 1 | Thesis

for the thesis of this assignment, you need to state your claim about human resource management along with three valid reasons.

Comment 2 | Thesis

consider framing the thesis as: I believe, compensation and social benefit leads to employee retention and good performance because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

Comment 3 | Thesis

These supporting points will make the thesis complete.

Improper Citation | Research/MLA Improper citation: Improperly cited material. Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html

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Comment 4 | Grammar

replace "and" with "that are" available immediately; while on the other hand,

Missing comma before a cc | Punctuation

Missing comma before a coordinating conjunction (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so - FANBOYS) that joins two sentences.

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Missing comma after IE | Punctuation Missing comma after an introductory element.

Comment 5 | Support & Dev

identify the main points to be discussed in the body of the essay. As per the thesis, you need only three supporting reasons for your claim. You need not use too many reasons here as this makes the writing lengthy.

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Improper Citation | Research/MLA Improper citation: Improperly cited material. Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Additional Comment

look for similar errors throughout the paper

summary | Coherence

A paragraph must always be summarized in your own words. The citation does not sum up the paragraph, but it leaves the readers with incomplete information.

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Comment 6 | Punctuation

incorrect capitalization

Comment 7 | Research/MLA

Works Cited

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Comment 8 | Research/MLA

cite the documents in the MLA format precisely.

RUBRIC: ENG101 V6:RESEARCH DRAFT

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3.95 / 5

3.50 / 5

Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions

Thesis or potential thesis is neither present in any portion of the essay, nor is it implied in any manner. Thesis may be present but incorrect for the assignment’s objectives/approach. Thesis may be present but the submission overall fails to meet most assignment objectives (such as the essay is only a paragraph) that determining the thesis’ viability is problematic.

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.

Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.

Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples.

Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.

3.50 / 5

Thesis support, thesis development, use of examples, logic, and reason

Support is more than lacking, such that it is insufficient for review (assignment does not meet length requirements). Body paragraphs may be very limited in original material for evaluation due to too much borrowed information and a problematic similarity report which qualifies the paper for an account hold and “similarity match: low” QuickMark.

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea. No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic development. Little-to-no argument is present. Topic development is flawed or non-existent. The body paragraphs have a poor mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. At least two arguments are present, but counterargument and refutation may be weak or missing. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning. The body paragraphs have an insufficient mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. More development needed for

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COHERENCE (15%)

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supporting reasons or evidence. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis. The body paragraphs have an adequate mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. At least three strong arguments, a counterargument, and a refutation are present. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs. The body paragraphs have a sufficient mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. At least three strong arguments, a counterargument, and a refutation are present. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis. The body paragraphs have an exceptional mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

4 / 5

Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences

Two or more major organizational elements are missing, such as an introduction and conclusion. Essay be one long paragraph with no discernible separation of ideas.

No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.

Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.

Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.

Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization.

Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.

5 / 5

Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary

May contain more than 8 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain more than 8 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Fails to demonstrate clarity in most sentences throughout the paper. The lack of

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lucidity makes it difficult for the reader to determine the paper’s focus.

May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.

May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.

May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.

May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.

5 / 5

Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement

Contains more than 7 different grammar errors. <br />The identical 5+ errors may be repeated throughout. <br /><br />

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. <br />The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

3.50 / 5

Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors

Contains more than 7 different punctuation/capitalization errors. <br />The identical 5+ errors may be repeated throughout.

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FORMAT (5%)

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Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. <br />The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

5 / 5

heading, title, margins, spacing, length*, underlined thesis *Length for the research paper is 800 words minimum

Format or word minimum is completely lacking. Formatting may be missing five or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, and/or thesis not underlined). Essay is severely underdeveloped, such that it includes only a paragraph or two.

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)

Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.

Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.

3.50 / 5

Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper requires at least four sources.

Sources are neither present on the Works Cited page nor employed in the paper. No attempt or implied intention to use sources. At least seven different errors in documenting sources. Similarity report may present potential plagiarism concerns, so much so that

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grading the paper is acceptable but the paper must be placed on an account hold due to qualifying for the “similarity match: low” QuickMark.

Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list.

Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.

Source minimum requirements (four credible sources) are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed.

Source minimum requirements (four credible sources) are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.

Source minimum requirements (four credible sources) are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.