Progressive paper

I thought that your thesis is very loud and clear for the reader. Very declarative of what to expect in this paper, so good job! Your thesis is very organized and correlates well with the consecutive sections following after. 2) I thought each section appropriately connects to your thesis. Minor thing; I was a little confused in the second section with the organization but I thought all the claims you made are valid to your argument. 3) I thought overall your essay is insightful from your commentary as well as the evidence you provided. The topic as a whole is something I could learn from since it was a topic I didn't choose for my personal essay. Good job!