research proposal

- avoid sentences that are longer than two lines; simplify the structure of your sentences; read your papers/responses/texts before you submit them. These are basic actions that will improve your writing skills and the writing style very much.

- add 5-7 keywords after each abstract. 

- do not use abbreviations (eg. US, IC) before spelling out the terms (United States, Intelligence Community). 

- you need to clearly state the research question before presenting the working hypotheses.

Your content is good. It is a good start, however it needs a more structured organization and a clear presentation of ideas.

You need to proofread your papers and pay more attention to details. There are typos in your paper and words missing, which shows the lack of attention.