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Essay 1: The purpose of the essay is get you to talk about your own experience in your own words, so there is no need for citing others' ideas and experiences. (expand to one more page write about a personal experience related to the topic) hence "am a student and am not American"

Essay 2: add more transition words, replace the (this, it, they etc..) with the nouns.

Expand the essay to one more page.

Essay 3: (melting pot) add transitions, make sure to give opinions about topics "personal opinions"

Expand the conclusion.

Essay4:(inequality for all) add more transitions , add conclusion, expand one page