Project Part 1

Feedback for 5-3-2 Project Part One: Planning Document Second Draft

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Submission Feedback

Thank you for your submission, China.  I enjoyed reading your draft, however, there are some sections of your paper that need to be corrected. Please check each section of the rubric to find my suggestions for improvement. Please make these revisions in Soomo so that when you download your planning document, it will show your corrected draft.  Once you have completed those revisions, you will be right on track to being successful on your final draft. Also, take time now to look at the final draft rubric to ensure that you achieve the new performance level descriptor "exemplary" on your final draft. Please keep working hard.

Rubric Name: SCI 200 Project Part One Second Draft Rubric

This table lists criteria and criteria group name in the first column. The first row lists level names and includes scores if the rubric uses a numeric scoring method.Criteria

Proficient

Needs Improvement

Not Evident

Introduction: Issue

5 points

Describes selected issue in natural sciences and its significance

3.75 points

Describes selected issue in natural sciences and its significance but with gaps in detail or clarity

0 points

Does not describe selected issue in natural sciences and its significance

5 / 5

Introduction: Science Resources

10 points

Describes at least three relevant and appropriate science resources that could be used to investigate selected issue

7.5 points

Describes at least three science resources that could be used to investigate selected issue but with gaps in appropriateness, relevance, or detail or is missing one or more sources

0 points

Does not describe science resources that could be used to investigate selected issue

10 / 10

Introduction: Specific Question

5 points

Develops specific question related to selected issue based on review of science resources

3.75 points

Develops specific question related to selected issue, but question is not based on review of science resources

0 points

Does not develop specific question related to selected issue

5 / 5

Body: Audience

10 points

Identifies an audience that would be interested in issue and question, citing source(s)

7.5 points

Identifies an audience, but audience is not appropriate for issue and question, or there are gaps in citation

0 points

Does not identify an audience

7.5 / 10

Criterion Feedback

China, please add a relevant APA in-text citation to this paragraph to achieve proficiency. Be sure to add the long citation to the reference page on the last page of your planning document.

Body: Message

10 points

Describes how and why message can be tailored to audience, providing specific examples and citing source(s)

7.5 points

Describes how and why message can be tailored to audience but with gaps in examples or citation

0 points

Does not describe how and why message can be tailored to audience

10 / 10

Body: Identify Principle(s)

10 points

Identifies natural science principle(s) that apply to issue and question, citing source(s)

7.5 points

Identifies natural science principle(s) that apply to issue and question but with gaps in accuracy or citation

0 points

Does not identify natural science principle(s) that apply to issue and question

10 / 10

Body: Explain Principle(s)

10 points

Explains how identified principle(s) apply to issue and question, citing source(s)

7.5 points

Explains how identified principle(s) apply to issue and question but with gaps in detail, clarity, or citation

0 points

Does not explain how identified principle(s) apply to issue and question

10 / 10

Conclusion: Hypothesis

15 points

Formulates hypothesis that addresses question based on investigation of question

11.25 points

Formulates hypothesis that addresses question, but hypothesis is not based on investigation of question

0 points

Does not formulate hypothesis that addresses question

11.25 / 15

Criterion Feedback

This hypothesis needs clarity, China. You have successful formulated a hypothesis, however, there is a lack of it being based upon empirical (experimental) evidence because it cannot be tested in this lifetime. Therefore, this hypothesis does not address your question completely. To strengthen this key element of your research paper you must base your hypothesis on your investigation. Doing so demonstrates that you used logic to come up with it. This was a new element within your research paper so it can be difficult to incorporate this aspect. I suggest, for your final draft, that you use the wording from your research question and add specific themes you learned from your investigation. For example, if your research question was "Do hovercrafts make for the best mode of transportation in off-shore townships in Virginia?", and your investigation found that hovercrafts use huge amounts of gas, your hypothesis might be "hovercrafts are more useful than cars for people living in off-shore townships, despite not being economical". An easier way to write your hypothesis is to use this template as a guideline: If _____[I do this] _____, then _____[this]_____ will happen. (Ex. If I give elementary aged children chocolate candy, then they will behave in a hyperactive manner.) I want you to grow from this feedback I've provided. Also, please watch this video: https://youtu.be/gjDcLprBxRo. Please make sure that your final draft contains these suggested changes. Keep working hard. You are just one step away!

Conclusion: Natural Scientist

15 points

Explains how a natural scientist would go about collecting evidence to support or refute hypothesis

11.25 points

Explains how a natural scientist would go about collecting evidence to support or refute hypothesis, but explanation has gaps in clarity, detail, or logic

0 points

Does not explain how a natural scientist would go about collecting evidence to support or refute hypothesis

11.25 / 15

Criterion Feedback

China, you received needs improvement for this section because your experiment is not based in the natural sciences. Please review your scientific research articles for ideas on how to create a unique natural science experiment that a natural scientist might use to test your research question and collect evidence to support or refute your hypothesis. Typically, this requires that you list the hypothetical next steps (with specific detail) of a natural scientist, if they were to continue researching your hypothesis. Please make this adjustment and you will be on track to be successful for your final draft.

Reference List

5 points

Provides reference list that includes all science resources used to investigate issue and question, and list is formatted according to current APA guidelines

3.75 points

Provides reference list that includes all science resources used to investigate issue and question, but list has gaps in adherence to current APA formatting guidelines

0 points

Does not provide reference list that includes all science resources used to investigate issue and question

5 / 5

Articulation of Response

5 points

Submission has no major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization

3.75 points

Submission has major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that negatively impact readability and articulation of main ideas

0 points

Submission has critical errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that prevent understanding of ideas

3.75 / 5

Criterion Feedback

China, there is an opportunity for improvement here. I like that you have submitted your rough draft. However, the way you have articulated your thoughts has caused your submission to have some problems with readability and articulation of its main ideas due to lack of details, format, and citation issues. Please take some time to review your submission and correct those errors. The correct the format issues, please use the setup sheet to assist to preparing your planning document. You can find it in announcement named "Important Planning Document Information." If you need assistance with your citations or anything else, please contact the SNHU Writing Center for assistance. They will be happy to help.

Rubric Total ScoreTotal

88.75 / 100

Overall Score

Overall Score

Proficient

Instructors should not modify this row (it will automate from the scores above). This score represents the average evaluation across all rubric criteria.

Needs ImprovementInstructors should not modify this row (it will automate from the scores above). This score represents the average evaluation across all rubric criteria.

Not EvidentInstructors should not modify this row (it will automate from the scores above). This score represents the average evaluation across all rubric criteria.

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