Topic: PBIS and the role of the school counselor

Make sure your Abstract is a small window into what your paper is about. Right now it is just a few general sentences.

I like where you are heading with your Intro section. A few things to work on: 1) provide more evidence and support (data points whether quant/qual, narrative, etc.). You have started to do that with the Vincent citation. Give your reader a bit more to help make your argument clearer. For eg. with this sentence- “Several researches show that suspension and expulsion rates are on the increase due to school disciplinary issues.”…give some of those citations. 2) Give some more explanation of what PBIS is with citations to help bolster what you write. It doesn’t need to be too long, but a bit more so the reader is very clear. Then the next step is to connect it well to your topic which is counselors supporting implementation, right? So what I need you to work on is the logical progression of ideas you have between the 1st couple lines explaining PBIS and the link you have to counselors. If your “problem” is about counselor implementation, this needs to be in the Intro. Right now you have mostly shared a couple stats and some general PBIS info. See how you can focus it more on the “problem” you have written about in your purpose. Then your Intro will connect more to your Purpose.

By the way, I can see RQs 1 and 3 and 4 sticking together well. #2 seems like a completely different paper that will take you off track. I wonder if you can combine #s 3 and 4 and then develop a 3rd RQ that can have some sort of an outcome through your CRL. Both #3 and 4 still read as a synthesis project and need a follow-up RQ that is more proactively results-oriented or outcome-oriented.. How do you take it to the next level? What do you do with this information you have synthesized between this RQ and your 1st one to help do “x, y, and z” with this synthesized info you have? That is what takes this from a simple synthesis to a critical review of the literature. What do you take as the next step with this info and the what are the conclusions and implications that you offer at the end based off of what you suggest as your outcome from your analysis? Continue to reflect on that, I have a feeling it is right there I front of you. Is your goal to reframe or alter what counselors realize- do they need to think about it in a different way? Once you’ve combined all this info, what do you do with it to take it forward? Is your goal to offer new ways through your theoretical perspective for counselors to consider for PBIS implementation?

For the Theoretical Framework section, it is really critical to include the counselor piece in the dialog with the framework of behaviorism you are utilizing. You need to be able to have that dialog between the “problem”/topic you are engaging with which centers the counselor in your project as it relates to PBIS, right? So, make sure this is the right/best framework. Utilize the Assignment Overview for this section to make sure you are on the right track. I am wondering if the right framework is related more to this part of your RQ#4- “professional effectiveness of school counselors?” It seems like your frame would be more about school counselor role/leadership or something related to that…see if that makes sense to you as you think about how you are framing your problem around school counselors as they implement PBIS.

Your Lit Review sections are heading in the right direction and seem to make sense. Continue adding plenty of evidence that supports your RQs/problem. See also if there is anything TF-related in the articles about role of counselor that may help drive the TF for your work. Something about their role seems to make more sense to me at least, when thinking about how to frame the problem.

NOTE: There are quite a # of grammar and APA format citation errors (and the Reference page- keep alpha order but no numbering and make sure you are using the correct format) and spacing errors. Consult APA Owl Purdue as a helpful guide. Also, give yourself plenty of time to proofread and edit. You are heading in the right direction. This work takes a lot of time- writing takes a lot of time, at least it sure does for me. Just give yourself the time you need and keep going forward.