Tourism system
remlya nahc
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Introduction: Summarizes the case and details an approach to a solution
Highlighted the most relevant points in the case study and shows linkages with relevant theory that will be used to support the answers to the case.
Maximum score
8
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The introduction was logical and contain statements that prepared the reader well for what is to come in the main content. |
6 / 8 |
6 / 8
Discussion: Approach and tourism product
Referenced the use of comprative advantage in the selection of tourism as economic activity and highlighted relevant points from information in the case study to justify the decision. This includes ease of access, availability of natural attractions and availability of a pool of labour.
Maximum score
18
Some evidence of a fairly good understanding of sustainable tourism development. There was little discussion on why consulting local people is important though.
11 / 18
Discussion: Analysis of the economic aspects of tourism
Identified economic advantages and disadvantages of tourism with detailed application of relevant theories such as multiplier effect, BOP and increased employment. Touched on other potential economic impacts such as FDI and entrepreneurship. Provided relevant application of answers in the context of the case.
Maximum score
18
Not much discussion found.
3 / 18
Discussions: Analysis of the soci-cultural aspects of tourism
Identified socio-cultural advantages and disadvantages of tourism with detailed application of relevant theories such as preservation of heritage, generation of interest in local art and craft and cross cultural appreciation. Touched on other potential socio-cultural impacts such as the demonstration effect and the erosion of morals. Provided relevant application of answers in the context of the case.
Maximum score
12
Hardly any relevant discussion.
3 / 12
Conclusion
The conclusion puts the previous parts of the paper together in a logical way, demonstrating a clear stance towards a solution for the scenario in the case study. The analysis provided supports the idea of developing an ecotourism based product that should be well managed and remains sustainable, preventing peripheral economic and socio-cultural damage.
Maximum score
10
Not clear where the conclusion was and what it contained.
4 / 10
Organisation. Spelling, Grammar, Sentence construction etc.
submission is very organised with well constructed paragraphs, and has clear headings. Excellent sentence construction and grammar with no spelling mistakes
Maximum score
7
English overall was slightly poor; some sentences were not clear.
4 / 7
Word Length & Referencing
the specified word length for each section is less that 10% higher or lower. Limited APA style in-text citations used throughout document. Limited reference list
Maximum score
7
6 / 7
37 / 80
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Friday, 6 April 2018, 12:09 PM |
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Feedback comments |
Ther seems to be quite a lot of effort put into writing this essay; many of the sentences were logicl, relevant and it is clear you have tried to explain things to put forth a strong argument.
There was however, a few discussions that seemed rather unnecessary, and that could have lengthened the entire essay.
The economic and socio-cultural impacts were not really discussed much at all.
Phun
