Essay 2

Essay # 2 by Bibi Atiya

Submission date: 16-Mar-2021 06:14PM (UTC-0700) Submission ID: 1534977444 File name: Untitled_document_26.docx (13.87K) Word count: 940 Character count: 4472

Artifact Great--now add the titles too

Connect to the background of the poems (the Holocaust) and the theme here rather than saying as much about poetry.

Consider opening with this and then discussing the Holocaust

H

"Letter to my Wife"

"Death Fugue"

What is their message? Aim to be more specific in the thesis statement

Consider exploring one poem at a time...one literary device at a time...

Excellent discussion

indent

Celan

(Celan)

Explore in a separate paragraph

Be more detailed here in the topic sentence THIS is a better

and really good topic sentence.

:

Nice "He...

Great!

Indent

cut this part...and move into what the poems do...

Bibi, there's some really wonderful discussion happening in this essay about the poems! In revision, aim to tighten the organization and the thesis and topic sentences. The body paragraphs are good but the topic sentences need more details to introduce them. Consider separating the paragraphs by poem and literary device. This way, the essay will have greater clarity. Nice start! I'm looking forward to your revision!

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Text Comment. Artifact

Text Comment. Great--now add the titles too

Text Comment. Connect to the background of the poems (the Holocaust) and the theme here rather than saying as much about poetry.

Text Comment. Consider opening with this and then discussing the Holocaust

Text Comment. H

Text Comment. "Letter to my Wife"

Text Comment. "Death Fugue"

Text Comment. What is their message? Aim to be more specific in the thesis statement

Text Comment. Consider exploring one poem at a time...one literary device at a time...

PAGE 2

Text Comment. Excellent discussion

Text Comment. indent

Text Comment. Celan

Text Comment. (Celan)

Text Comment. Explore in a separate paragraph

Text Comment. Be more detailed here in the topic sentence

Text Comment. THIS is a better and really good topic sentence.

Text Comment. :

Text Comment. Nice

Text Comment. "He...

Text Comment. Great!

PAGE 3

Text Comment. Indent

Text Comment. cut this part...and move into what the poems do...

Text Comment. Bibi, there's some really wonderful discussion happening in this essay about the poems! In revision, aim to tighten the organization and the thesis and topic sentences. The body paragraphs are good but the topic sentences need more details to introduce them. Consider separating the paragraphs by poem and literary device. This way, the essay will have greater clarity. Nice start! I'm looking forward to your revision!

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BIBI ATIYA

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ORGANIZATION

Response writes the author and title of the article each summary.

READER RESPONSE

The summary identifies the main idea of each article and explains the significance of the main idea.

WRITING

Each summary has 5-7 complete sentences and identifies and discusses the main idea and the supporting ideas for each article.