English essay

Essay 1: Fiction by Bibi Atiya

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Consider a title that makes a comment on the stories and add the titles to the title.

Consider opening with the theme

Lyman

Introduce both stories in the opening.

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Create a thesis statement or comment on the stories. What do they teach readers? What do they both have in common?

Now add your comment on the stories and your thesis statement.

Include topic sentence

Bibi, this is a good start. I think comparing these stories makes the thesis statement and the essay more challenging, as these two stories have less in common. You might consider exploring education in "Girl" to go with "The Lesson" or "Sonny's Blues" or "The Things They Carried with "The Red Convertible." Aim to discuss the literary devices in support of the theme. Please see the sample introduction in Discussion Board. Notice how both stories and the theme they share are introduced in the opening. The opening, at this draft, still needs a thesis statement and the essay needs topic sentences. Looking forward to your revision.

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Essay 1: Fiction ORIGINALITY REPORT

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Essay 1: Fiction GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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Text Comment. Consider a title that makes a comment on the stories and add the titles to the title.

Text Comment. Consider opening with the theme

Text Comment. Lyman

Text Comment. Introduce both stories in the opening.

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Missing "," Missing comma: Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your reader to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the following example: "While everyone was fighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing.

Missing "," Missing comma: Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your reader to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the following example: "While everyone was fighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing.

Text Comment. Create a thesis statement or comment on the stories. What do they teach readers? What do they both have in common?

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Text Comment. Now add your comment on the stories and your thesis statement.

Include topic sentence Include a topic sentence that previews the point you will discuss. Your readers should be able to clearly connect the purpose of each paragraph back to your claim.

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Text Comment. Bibi, this is a good start. I think comparing these stories makes the thesis statement and the essay more challenging, as these two stories have less in common. You might consider exploring education in "Girl" to go with "The Lesson" or "Sonny's Blues" or "The Things They Carried with "The Red Convertible." Aim to discuss the literary devices in support of the theme. Please see the sample introduction in Discussion Board. Notice how both stories and the theme they share are introduced in the opening. The opening, at this draft, still needs a thesis statement and the essay needs topic sentences. Looking forward to your revision.

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ORGANIZATION

Response writes the author and title of the article each summary.

READER RESPONSE

The summary identifies the main idea of each article and explains the significance of the main idea.

WRITING

Each summary has 5-7 complete sentences and identifies and discusses the main idea and the supporting ideas for each article.