english composition lll/week5/project

Please respond to each classmate if there is a need for it and also any suggestion and comment that u may think are need it in order to correct the rough draft for the final use it

1)Hey---------, I like your introduction, your thesis is clear and it is in the last sentence of the intro. I think that the big theme of this story is to hold on to our traditional ancestral values, or at least respect these values because they are important and we clearly see it in the story. I would suggest to watch out for spelling errors and to work a little more on your conclusion, I would recommend giving more summary and more details in explaining your thesis. 

2) hello -----,

I like your explination and view of this short story. Other then giving a little more detail from the story I think you did great. What made you choose this story to write about?

After reading you paper what made you choice this story? I like how you talk about the story and how you break everything down. I know you wanted to keep everything original I believe you could have adding just a little more to your paper. I can completely understand how writing papers can be hard keep up the amazing work. 

3)Hi, -----------

 I also had chosen the same story to write about. I thought you had done a good job. I know its hard to think of so many words, about the the same thing. But my understanding is we werent allowed to use out side sources. We were only allowed to use our book. May be I misunderstood, which is very possible. Did you agree with the villagers for destroying the school, because their path was blocked off?