WRITING ACTIVITY 4

Writing Activity 2

Pragya Pachhai

ENG 215- Research and Writing

Professor: Kasraie

March 3, 2019

Outline

· Introduction

A. An amazing attachment between both parent and children.

· Body

A. A child needs to be a complete well- being.

1. Healthy body and mind.

2. Deal with every situation

B. Physical comfort to the child.

1. Spiritually strong

2. Emotionally strong.

C. Children are a quick learner and grow very fast.

1. Parents should teach them life lessons.

2. Physical and mental health.

D. Counter Perspective: Every parent may form their own ideas about raising or parenting their child.

1. Response to counter perspective: Time management is one of the biggest problems for modern generations parents. Busy schedule makes them so difficult to balance to both work and family.

· Conclusion:

A. A child needs to be protected and that's the job of every parent.

Working Thesis Statement

· We should not give our child more of physical comforts rather than make them emotionally and spiritually stronger than yourself.

Starting Draft

There is an amazing attachment between both parents and children. We can’t parent our children whose heart we don’t have. So, this is absolutely important. So, children need to fall deeply into attachment, and we need to make it easy for them. Children need to have that secure attachment because without that it becomes difficult for a child to reach many of the other milestones that need to happen in terms of their emotional development. A secure attachment is developed when a child feels safe and protected in their relationship with their parents and secure attachments are a big deal. They are one of the key indicators for a child's long-term, health, and happiness. It is about the relationship with the child that if it is secure the relationship is healthy. So, it's kind of like how trusting and safe the child feels with their parents. Parents conflict can also affect a child's wellbeing. So, if parents are making an angry face, yelling or one parent is showing a sign of fear that undermines the child's sense of emotional security.

If the parents are depressive or unresponsible parents or neglectful and abusive parents, then they will probably not be able to develop a secure attachment through non-verbal cues. The way an attachment is initially built between parent and a child is through non- verbal cues babies. We need to change the habit of the child for complete wellbeing. Complete wellbeing includes a powerful soul, next to a healthy body and then a beautiful relationship. We also need to do little efforts and some changes in our thoughts. So, that we can make complete wellbeing in the child. It takes only a few days of determination and sincere efforts to change a habit. The longer we live with that habit, we become emotionally weaker, and changing the habit will then take longer. Spiritual health is the foundation for mental, emotional, physical and social health.

Feedback Reflection

Feedback from Writing Activity 1

1.) The topic needs to be clearer. It seems based on personal opinion. You need to include six summaries of the top three sources that you think you might use in your paper. As you develop your position and the supporting points to use in the paper, you will see that the research you do adds greatly to your understanding of your topic and position. Do not be surprised if your initial position changes as you do more research! Make sure of course, that your sources are relevant and credible sources. You will want to use the learning resource center in the university library to find many of your sources. In addition, it is important to include objective summaries to help you keep track of your sources, see the information in the course shell about summaries as well as in the web text, section 3.6.

How Feedback was used

The draft that was submitted includes an idea for hooking the audience. It is almost always helpful to use as a well- known reflective writing as a structural device for your writing especially if you are not used to writing this way. This hook involves pointing out the reality of a child and a parent involve strongly to raise a newborn baby into a young person. This needs lots of efforts and time.

Time management is very tough for these modern generation parents who go for work. It is very difficult for them to manage time between work and family. They also don’t have any option because they have to work to solve the financial needs of the family and also to support the family.

Finally, this starting draft includes evidence from one of the sources listed in writing activity 1. The rough draft of Writing Activity 3 will include more sources.

How Feedback will help with future writing

I think it’s really important to honor the work that students do in writing by providing them with some great descriptive feedback. It can improve writing skills. Sometimes we might miss the bigger picture such as how the essay fits together as a whole because we are too focused on the details. It also provides the motivation that we need to get writing in the first place. It helps in developing our own critical and evaluative capacities.