Rough Draft Argument paper

August 20, 2019

Mrs. Teresa Lao

Title of Paper

Revised Thesis Statement

Level One Heading (Topic 1): Advanced Background checks

Topic Sentence: There should be a system in place that would require a more advanced background check in order to purchase weapons.

· Main Point 1: Mental Fitness as well

· Supporting Research: According to Shortell (2018), Under federal law, a person can be tallied in a database and barred from purchasing or possessing a firearm due to a mental illness under two conditions: if he is involuntarily committed to a mental hospital, or if a court or government body declares him mentally incompetent.

· Information Source: Shortell, David (2018), How do Laws prevent mentally ill people from buying guns? Retrieved from www.cnn.com

· Main Point 2: Red flag individuals to prevent the purchase of weapons

· Supporting Research: Also known as extreme risk protection orders, the laws allow authorities to temporarily take away guns from individuals who are deemed dangerous by a judge. (Boghani, 2019)

· Information Source: Boghani, P. (2019). “Red Flag “. Laws allow guns to be taken from “Dangerous “ People. Retrieved from pbs.org

· Main Point 3: Create a system to have a more in depth investigate someone’s background

· Supporting Research: Henigan, (2018). The flaw that has received the most attention is that federal background checks are required only for sales by licensed gun dealers, allowing transactions between private persons to occur with no check at all. In multiple other ways, though, the federal system reflects a core premise that, unless abandoned, will always limit its effectiveness: The background check law prioritizes easy access to guns by law-abiding gun owners over efforts to ensure that violent people do not get guns.

· Information Source: Henigan, D. (2018). How to fox background checks. Retrieved from www. Slate .com/news

Level One Heading (Topic 2) Secure Common places

Topic Sentence Better security is a must for our families when they visit common places such as malls and restaurants.

· Main Point 1Having undercover security personnel in place would be a great idea.

· Supporting Research: According to inter state security, (2018). As part of an undercover operation, our agents will have a briefing with you were a detailed plan will be made. You will go into the operation with a timeline, strategy and tactics, potential outcomes, and knowing how your resources will be used

· Information Source: Inter State Security (2018). The benefits of undercover security. Retrieved from www.interstatesecuritycorp.com

· Main Point 2: Invest in a better security surveillance system in our public places

· Supporting Research: According to Duke (2019). One of the most significant benefits of surveillance cameras in public places is the way they support unified city-wide security plans

· Information Source: Duke, W. (2019). What are the benefits of Surveillance cameras in public places for Unified city-wide Security plans? Retrieved from www.3sixtyintegrated.com

· Main Point 3: Invest in body cameras for security personnel and not just for law enforcement personnel.

· Supporting Research: According to THE APPTIMES, Fortunately, a study conducted by the Urban Institute, a U.S.-based socio-economic research group has found proof of exact ROIs from installing security cameras. In the study, one control area which was installed with 500 cameras that cost a total of $8.1 million enabled the said area to save a total of approximately $12 million in criminal justice costs, resulting in savings of $1.50 for every dollar spent. One other control area showed even greater results, with total savings of around $4.30 for every dollar spent.

· Information Source: The APPTIMES. Are security cameras worth Investment? Retrieved from www.theapptimes.com/securitycameras

Level One Heading (Topic 3) Hire Security

Topic Sentence: Must think about hiring more security personnel to provide security and make places safer.

· Main Point 1: Better training for security personnel

· Supporting Research: According to Security Services, (2004). Proper training, without a doubt, improves a security officer’s credentials and credibility as a professional.

· Information Source: Security Services, (2004). The importance of being trained. Retrieved from www.securitymagazine.com

· Main Point 2: Have the same amount of security outside as there would be inside of an establishment.

· Supporting Research

· Information Source

· Main Point 3: Give some type of monetary incentive to attract qualified security personnel to want to do the job.

· Supporting Research: according to Lillethorup, (2016). brilliant idea of helping his guards advance their careers into law-enforcement through his extensive network of relationships with local and regional agencies. This personalized program allowed his guards to move up in their careers to patrol officers or managerial positions, and, eventually, on to police academy and active duty law-enforcement.

· Information Source: Lillethorup, B. (2016). Effective employee incentives for security guards. Retrieved from www.lyconic.com

References

· APA-formatted reference for information source #1

· I have the utmost confidence in this because it hits home to the exact root of where the problems lie in this situation from a very good point of view and explains in detail of how the law effects the people.

· APA-formatted reference for information source #2

These sections are title show how these things will come into play once in place to help deter such unusual things that are occurring all over the U.S. and hopefully can show how we can prevent such things from happening again on any given day in the future if these steps are followed.

· APA-formatted reference for information source #3

· These give a look at the type of people who are there on the ground when things happen and we can see what type of personnel are needed and the type of training that can be implemented for them as well as having a program put in place to help with security companies as well.

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