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ENG-105 Peer Review Worksheet: Review
Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.
Name of the draft’s author: Ashley Murphey
Name of the peer reviewer: Ryan Zyla
Reviewer
After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.
While there are only two paragraphs of the paper it seems to be in a good spot and going in the right direction. The descibing of the criteria of what makes a source crediable has good detail but it does not actually mention the criteria. Also, there are some acroymns that should be spelt out first.
After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.
Review Content and Ideas
· How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make in this review?
Not quite sure what the thesis is. I have an idea of what it would be but it is not stated.
· How successfully does the writer establish a set of criteria that an audience would find acceptable?
The writer did a good job in the outline prior to the paper but did not actually mention or state the criteria names.
· How effectively does the writer compare the subject of the review to the established criteria?
Some of the statements seem to be assumptions and observations not relateing back to the criteria.
· Does the author identify and make comparisons with other evaluations on the same topic and/or websites similar to the subject? Are these sources cited within the essay?
There are sources, but not the actual AARP website.
· How persuasively is evidence used to justify the criteria and the comparison?
Not much to the paper to complete the comparison.
How effectively does the essay’s content support the thesis by using strategies appropriate for reviews, as outlined in chapter 9 of Writing With Purpose?
Not sure what the thesis was.
Organization
· How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper?
The first paragraph starts off strong but does not keep my interest.
· Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below.
Not sure what the thesis is.
· How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?
There is only one sentence and it does not talk about anything that is mentioned in the first paragraph.
· How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay?
There is no conclusion.
Format
· How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Is the required minimum number of sources listed?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
Language Use and Style
· Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone.
|_|Yes |_|No Needs some work though
· How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
Grammar and Mechanics
· Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.
|_|Yes |_|No Just not a good flow
Three things that I liked about your draft are:
1. AARP is a known resource
2. the outline before the paper seems to appear strong
3. Two scholarly sources
Three things that could be improved are:
1. Thesis
2. Stating the criteria that you are referencing
3. Catchier intro
