Presenting Information: Drafting Your Essay

Week 6 Discussion: Peer Review

Use this template to provide constructive criticism to at least one peer in your class who has not received feedback. Thank you!

GENERAL

· What did the writer do well in the essay? Please be specific.

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THESIS

· How does the writer indicate that it will be a personal essay? Is there a clear thesis? Describe how features of the essay and thesis work and/or need work.

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· Do all major points relate back to the thesis statement? In short, does the writer seem to go off topic in places? If so, how? (In other words, is the paper unified and are all points related?) If not, suggest ways to correct.

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ORGANIZATION/STRUCTURE

· List the use of transitional words and phrases that show chronology or shifts in topic. Are additional transitions needed? If so, where?

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· Indicate where the writer uses features like concrete language, abstract language, or tone effectively.

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· Does the writer provide enough description, dialogue, or narration so that you can

easily infer the thesis or controlling idea for the essay? Where might the writer include more dialogue, narration, or description?

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EDITING

· Suggest at least one item the writer might add to this essay.

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· Suggest at least one item the writer might remove from this essay.

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CONCLUSION

· Is the concluding paragraph effective? If so, why? If it is not effective, what can be done?

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After completing this template, copy and paste your responses to the discussion board. Your response should be posted as a reply to the original thread for the essay that you reviewed.