Edit Chapter 1 and 2 dissertation
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Editsneededforchapter1and2ofdissertation2.9.22.docxRecommended Changes from Week 6
1. 1: The opening paragraph still needs work. See comments on paper.
2. Chapter 1: Background of the study needs clarity. See comments on paper.
3. Chapter 1: The specific problem is still not clear.
4. Chapter 1: Need a clear purpose statement.
5. Chapter 1: Continue to work on stronger alignment of the problem statement and purpose statement.
6. Chapter 1: Significance of study need more information.
7. Chapter 1: You are still confused about what the research design is . . . work on that.
8. Chapter 1: Research questions are overloaded. Keep them simple.
9. Chapter 1: Theoretical framework did not meet requirements. See comments on the side of the paper.
10. Chapter 1: Definition of terms – some may not be relevant to study depending on the final focus. You may need additional new definitions. Keep visiting this section to update as needed.
11. Chapter 1: The limitations, delimitations, and summary need more work.
12. Chapter 2: Introduction is too long.
13. Chapter 2: Title searches section needs work see specific comments on paper.
14. Chapter 2: Historical Literature - This entire historical content is from one author . . . Lusardi et al, 2015. That is unacceptable.
15. Chapter 2: Current literature is too short. Current literature by itself should be at least 20 pages by the end of the dissertation.
16. Chapter 2: Current Literature: What needs to be discussed under current literature are current studies that has been on your topic, not opinion of authors. In that way, you can establish what has been done and what else need to be done, in terms of gap in the literature.
17. Chapter 2: Work on adding information to the current content literature section.
18. Chapter 2: Work on adding actual studies to the current content literature section.
19. Work on sentence clarity throughout the document. Write formally. Avoid informal language and jargons.
20. Chapter 2: Theoretical framework: Give examples of a related study that used the theoretical framework (model) you are proposing. Explain the fit.
21. Chapter 2 - Missing Methodological literature: Address methodologies accomplished in previous research within the selected topic and support the selected methodology. This again is splashed intermittently within the paper. Find them and put them under the appropriate heading. Use UOPX template to rearrange your dissertation.
22. Use professional language in the dissertation document. For guide see “Appropriate Language” guide at https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/academic_writing/using_appropriate_language/index.html
23. Anytime, you make major changes in any chapter, always go back to the introduction, summary, and conclusion, and let those reflect the new changes. Do not wait for the instructor to highlight the new problem.
24. Support all assertions with literature.
25. APA issue: Work on APA reference style.
26. Send a copy of your Chapter 1 and 2 to your URM, so you have another set of eyes looking at the paper. In that way you have rich feedback to develop the revised paper that is due in week 8.
27. Address the issues highlighted on the paper by your chair and URM.
28. Avoid Anthropomorphism - is the attribution of human characteristics to nonhuman entities, objects, or concepts. It results in ambiguity or misleading communication and thus should be avoided. See APA 7th edition, Section 4.11 for more information.
