Proficient - Develops a workable rough draft from the Week 2 outline. The rough draft is slightly underdeveloped, demonstrating some progression in the steps of the writing process.
Proficient - States details about the selected reading and the topic that it explores, but not all are what is important in the reading. Minor details are missing or slightly unclear.
Proficient -Composes an argument in response to topic of the selected essay, and supports the response with examples and at least one quote and one paraphrase from the selected essay. The argument is slightly underdeveloped or unclear.
Basic - The paper is organized with an introduction, thesis statement, and conclusion. The introduction, thesis statement, and/or conclusion require improvement.
Basic - Written work contains language that is somewhat appropriate in diction and tone according to the assignment guidelines. Academic vocabulary is somewhat integrated throughout the assignment.
Basic - Displays basic comprehension of grammar and spelling. Written work contains a few errors which may slightly distract the reader.
Proficient - Exhibits APA formatting throughout the paper. However, layout contains a few minor errors.
Distinguished - The length of the paper is equivalent to the required number of correctly formatted pages.
Below Expectations - Uses an inadequate number of sources that provide little or no support for ideas. Sources used may not be scholarly. Most sources on the reference page are not used within the body of the assignment. Citations are not formatted correctly.
T
his is a good start, so far. You have some good ideas going here in your rough draft,
and you made some interesting points about your chosen essay. You also
put forth a
good effort on your thesis statement, in terms of its structure,but please see my
comments about eliminating the "announcing" part of it and any other self
-
referential
phrase.
Also, you didn't quite follow through on using it effectively as th
e
organizational structure of your essay.
Remember that the
three supporting points
should be the basis for your body paragraphs, and that relationship should be reflected
in the topic sentences for each paragraph. Topic sentences should perform three
func
tions: state the overall main idea, cover one of the three supporting points, and act
as a transition between paragraphs.
II. Body paragraph 1, topic sentence 1: "Parents
often have to "make it work" under difficult circumstances by being patient.III. Body
para. 2, topic sentence 2: "Parents often have to "make it work" under difficult
circumstances not only by being patient, but by being flexible as well.
IV. Body para.
3, topic sentence 3:
Parents often have to "make it work" under difficult
circumstance
s by being patient and flexible; they also have to make the most of the
resources they have available to them.
In addition, you were required to use at least
one outside source other than your chosen essay, so be sure to visit the Ashford
Library to find m
ore academic sources to add to your essay.
In terms of academic
voice, keep in mind that first and second person usage (I, me, my, us, we, our, you,
etc.) is prohibited in academic writing. You must write exclusively in third
person.
Lastly, be sure to r
eview the grammar, style, and proofreading errors I
pointed out, and work on those moving forward. Remember that you can submit drafts
of your work to the Writing Center for additional help in these areas before turning
them in for a grade.
Otherwise, I en
joyed reading your draft and look forward to
seeing your progress!Jamie
(1.76 / 2.00); : Develops a Workable Rough Draft from the Week 2 Outline, Demonstrating Progression in the Steps of the
Writing Process
Proficient
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Develops a workable rough draft&n
bsp;from the Week 2 outline. The
rough draft is slightly underdeveloped, demonstrating some progression in the steps of
the writing process.
(1.76 / 2.00); : States Details About What is Most Important in the Selected Reading and the Topic That it Explores
Proficient
-
States details about the selected reading and the topic that it explores, but
not all are what is important in the reading. Min
or details are missing or slightly
unclear.
(3.52 / 4.00); : Composes an Argument in Response to Topic of the Selected Essay, and Supports the Response with
Examples and at Least One Quote and One Paraphrase from the Selected Essay
Proficient
-
Composes an
argument in response to topic of the selected essay, and
supports the response with examples and at least one quote and one paraphrase from
the selected essay. The argument is slightly underdeveloped or unclear.
This is a good start, so far. You have some good ideas going here in your rough draft,
and you made some interesting points about your chosen essay. You also put forth a
good effort on your thesis statement, in terms of its structure,but please see my
comments about eliminating the "announcing" part of it and any other self-referential
phrase. Also, you didn't quite follow through on using it effectively as the
organizational structure of your essay. Remember that the three supporting points
should be the basis for your body paragraphs, and that relationship should be reflected
in the topic sentences for each paragraph. Topic sentences should perform three
functions: state the overall main idea, cover one of the three supporting points, and act
as a transition between paragraphs. II. Body paragraph 1, topic sentence 1: "Parents
often have to "make it work" under difficult circumstances by being patient.III. Body
para. 2, topic sentence 2: "Parents often have to "make it work" under difficult
circumstances not only by being patient, but by being flexible as well. IV. Body para.
3, topic sentence 3: Parents often have to "make it work" under difficult
circumstances by being patient and flexible; they also have to make the most of the
resources they have available to them. In addition, you were required to use at least
one outside source other than your chosen essay, so be sure to visit the Ashford
Library to find more academic sources to add to your essay. In terms of academic
voice, keep in mind that first and second person usage (I, me, my, us, we, our, you,
etc.) is prohibited in academic writing. You must write exclusively in third
person. Lastly, be sure to review the grammar, style, and proofreading errors I
pointed out, and work on those moving forward. Remember that you can submit drafts
of your work to the Writing Center for additional help in these areas before turning
them in for a grade. Otherwise, I enjoyed reading your draft and look forward to
seeing your progress!Jamie
(1.76 / 2.00); : Develops a Workable Rough Draft from the Week 2 Outline, Demonstrating Progression in the Steps of the
Writing Process
Proficient - Develops a workable rough draft from the Week 2 outline. The
rough draft is slightly underdeveloped, demonstrating some progression in the steps of
the writing process.
(1.76 / 2.00); : States Details About What is Most Important in the Selected Reading and the Topic That it Explores
Proficient - States details about the selected reading and the topic that it explores, but
not all are what is important in the reading. Minor details are missing or slightly
unclear.
(3.52 / 4.00); : Composes an Argument in Response to Topic of the Selected Essay, and Supports the Response with
Examples and at Least One Quote and One Paraphrase from the Selected Essay
Proficient -Composes an argument in response to topic of the selected essay, and
supports the response with examples and at least one quote and one paraphrase from
the selected essay. The argument is slightly underdeveloped or unclear.
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