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draft on careeer assessment .docx

by Stephanie Badio

Submission date: 27-Jul-2020 03:37AM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1362738008 File name: draft_on_careeer_assessment_.docx (22.7K) Word count: 1222 Character count: 6273

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14% SIMILARITY INDEX

1% INTERNET SOURCES

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14% STUDENT PAPERS

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draft on careeer assessment .docx ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to Southern New Hampshire University - Continuing Education Student Paper

Submitted to HotChalk Inc Student Paper

Submitted to University of Glasgow Student Paper

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FINAL GRADE

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draft on careeer assessment .docx GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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Level 1 heading is centered; applies to all subsequent Level 1 headings- see project outline guide

Comment 1

-Review title of heading-follow the project outline

-Review APA format for Level 1 heading (e.g., bold font)

-Applies to all Level 1 headings

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-Indent all paragraphs

-Applies to all paragraphs

Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will

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not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her. Additional Comment

The purpose should be more specific with details on the purpose of this career assessment report for your client

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Run-on Run-on sentence: The sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or semicolon.

Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her. Additional Comment

See comment above

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WC Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

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This word has been used often. Consider a pronoun or a close synonym.

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WC Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning. Additional Comment

"client" is the preferred term here

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Connect ideas effectively Make the relationships between your ideas more clear. Try to use transitional phrases like "as a result," "despite," or "therefore" to show how your ideas connect. Additional Comment

This is a good summary; however, the client descriptions should connect more easily.

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Improper Citation Improper citation: Improperly cited material. Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Additional Comment

-Omit comma before citation

_Applies to all citations preceded by a comma

Evaluate source relevance Evaluate your evidence in this section. The source is not relevant to the topic and/or writing task. Reread the assignment instructions and choose a different source to support your claim.

Review how to evaluate a source's relevance with this quick video. Additional Comment

-This theory is not associated with any covered in the career course and text. I recommend that you choose among more researched career theories versus relying on this outside source

-A career theory applicable to your client was not adequately addressed

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Awk. Awkward: The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting.

Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her. Additional Comment

A career theory was not adequately selected

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Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her. Additional Comment

A career theory was not adequately selected

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The correct heading should "Assessment Review I"- follow project outline

Address task Present a topic sentence that clearly addresses the task. Look back at the question and revise your response so that your ideas on the topic are clear. Additional Comment

The task was to give a brief description/introductory paragraph about the Personality Assessment (the number of questions, time requirements, what it measures)- see project outline guide

Organize ideas Organize your ideas in a structure that is easy to follow. First, state your topic sentence at the beginning of your response. Then, present the evidence that best develops your ideas. Finally, clearly explain how the evidence supports your topic sentence. Additional Comment

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You should organize each assessment and discuss under separate headings as shown in the project outline

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Insert: "Personality and Career Assessment: Appropriateness" headings (Level II)" - use heading titles and levels as shown on project outline guide

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You need to identify both assessments here and cite them accordingly.

Organize ideas Organize your ideas in a structure that is easy to follow. First, state your topic sentence at the beginning of your response. Then, present the evidence that best develops your ideas. Finally, clearly explain how the evidence supports your topic sentence. Additional Comment

You should organize each assessment topic and discuss under separate headings as shown in the project outline

-Applies to all combined discussions under the Assessment Review-follow project outline

Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her. Additional Comment

This was a vague connection to the assessments you administered and your client

Review evidence Be sure all evidence is represented appropriately and that you provide the most relevant examples to support your ideas. Additional Comment

Citing a source relevant to the assessments you administered is better here

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Awk. Awkward: The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting.

Check evidence Check your evidence here. Be sure to represent all information appropriately. Additional Comment

A cited source for this section will substantiate the discussion here

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Include actual data. What are the numbers?

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-Missing validity/reliability data

-Validity and reliability were not adequately addressed

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WC Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

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Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you

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offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her. Additional Comment

Validity and reliability were not adequately addressed to support your conclusion

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WC Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

WC Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

Connect ideas effectively Make the relationships between your ideas more clear. Try to use transitional phrases like "as a result," "despite," or "therefore" to show how your ideas connect. Additional Comment

A good general discussion on multicultural considerations; however, the discussion should be specific to the assessments selected and your client.

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Clarify ideas Maintain the use of vocabulary specific to the topic throughout your response. Then, proofread all sentences to be sure you are communicating your ideas clearly.

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Clarify ideas Maintain the use of vocabulary specific to the topic throughout your response. Then, proofread all sentences to be sure you are communicating your ideas clearly.

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Connect ideas effectively Make the relationships between your ideas more clear. Try to use transitional phrases like "as a result," "despite," or "therefore" to show how your ideas connect. Additional Comment

A good general discussion on administration considerations; however, the discussion should be specific to the assessments selected and your client.

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Review reference page format

Additional Comment

This is a good Reference page 1)Review APA format to correct format error for the source s listed (e.g., retrieved from internet links and/ or publishing information is missing for the sources listed.

2)Need to ensure that all sources listed on the reference page are cited within the paper

3) Ensure that reference selection is sufficient; (e.g., the expectation is one source for each heading- see rubric submission guidelines).

4) Format and spacing errors noted