Write a Narrative(Story!!) Based on Rough Draft to Final Draft.(3 pages)

Draft 1

Throughout my life, I loved social media. When am talking about the social mean Facebook, Tweeter among other forms of media? I liked to post my photos and any personal images. I used to post photos from wherever I could capture photos when am traveling when am at home, when on certain occasions and many other areas. I could post the pictures without even asking for any advice from friends or even my family. My family would always advise me not posts more personal photos to the social media.

 

There were those times I could think of what could happen in my life because of posting these pictures. For me, I thought that posting photos in social media would add celebrity to my life and make me be known more in the world. Opposite from my thoughts my family could advise me not to post because exposing myself and my private things in the whole world does not come with the celebrity only but also can be dangerous and can even cause harm in my life. There were many times I thought of what could happen if we were to lose our way from the trail and have to live off of the land until we found our way back to civilization. I thought it would be the greatest experience ever because no one would be telling me not to post photos.

As I grew older, I continued to go for these walks with our parents, and wherever we could go, I would take photos and then upload them to social media. I decided to upload a picture of which we were all as a family and as usual I did not tell anyone of our family. On that day we had a walk in a nearby forest. Everything in the woods seemed different. The trees were a deeper shade of green. The bushes had been a deeper shade of green. The birds chirped in a one-of-a-kind tone. Vines covered almost each inch of the floor. One a part of me never wanted this moment to quit. I felt completely unfastened from the stress of my existence outside of the woods. It changed at this time that I realized that I would an awful lot instead live right here for the relaxation of my lifestyles than move again to society. The pictures have been gorgeous because of the lovely trees in the forest. It came to attain my own family that I have been uploading images in social media despite them knowing. My circle of relatives bowled over to me because the woods we had been was prohibited to anybody without authorities power. So it becomes like breaking news all over in social media. I couldn’t imagine what a mess I had executed to my own family. Things like no longer being capable of locating your way again to in which you came from make you respect the little things in life.

Comment:

You're off to a good start with your rough draft. You have lots of nice details and I can SEE your ideas. And while I understand what your point is, it is a little unclear. I recommend revising it and making sure it's very clear to your reader. Please start to revise this.