dissertation13threvieweditsstillneeded.docx
1. Chapter 1: The opening paragraph still needs work. See comments on paper.
2. Chapter 1: Background of the study needs clarity. See comments on paper.
3. Chapter 1: The specific problem is still not clear.
4. Chapter 1: Need a clear purpose statement.
5. Chapter 1: Continue to work on stronger alignment of the problem statement and purpose statement.
6. Chapter 1: It is not clear if the area of study is financial literacy curriculum, spending habits of teenagers, or financial literacy curriculum gap, if the last one, what is the benchmark?
7. Chapter 1: Significance of study needs focus.
8. Chapter 1: Method and design section needs work. You are still confused about what the research design is . . . work on that. Use methodologist authors for the discussion here.
9. Chapter 1: Research questions are overloaded. Keep them simple.
10. Chapter 1: Theoretical framework did not meet requirements. See comments on the side of the paper. The conceptual framework of the study is not identified.
11. Chapter 1: Definition of terms – Keep definitions to the purpose of study.
12. Chapter 1: The limitations, delimitations, and summary still need work.
13. Chapter 2: Introduction: Not a good opening for Chapter 2. The introduction should give a snapshot of what this chapter is about.
14. Chapter 2: Title searches section needs work see specific comments on paper.
15. Chapter 2: Historical Literature – Still unacceptable. See comments on paper.
16. Chapter 2: Current literature is too short. Current literature does is more of assertions than actual studies by authors.
17. Chapter 2: Current Literature: What needs to be discussed under current literature are current studies that has been on your topic, not opinion of authors. In that way, you can establish what has been done and what else need to be done, in terms of gap in the literature.
18. Chapter 2: Work on adding information to the current content literature section.
19. Chapter 2: Work on adding actual studies to the current content literature section.
20. Chapter 2: Theoretical framework: Give examples of a related study that used the theoretical framework (model) you are proposing. Explain the fit.
21. Chapter 2 - Methodological and Design literature: Writing unclear and some information does not belong. Use methodologist authors for the discussion here.
22. Reference: All paper in reference list MUST be paper cited in the document. Vice visa, all paper in the document should be in the reference list. No paper should be in the reference that was not cited in the document.
23. Reference: The authors in the reference should be the actual authors who said what you cited in the paper.
24. Reference: Free: Recite checks that the authors and dates in the body of your work match up with the references at the end. Then Recite tells you where it finds errors. Visit https://reciteworks.com
25. Chapters 1 and 2: Too many repeats of the same idea throughout the document.
26. How to write a paragraph: A paragraph is a series of sentences that are organized and coherent and are all related to a single topic. A writing document should be organized into meaningful paragraphs. This is because paragraphs show a reader where the subdivisions of a writing document begin and end, and thus help the reader see the organization of the paper and grasp its main points. Each paragraph should have a topic sentence, main idea, and finish with connecting to the reason for the writing. In the last section of a paragraph summarize the connections between the information discussed in the body of the paragraph and the paragraph’s controlling idea.
27. The last section of a paragraph should summarize the connections between the information discussed in the body of the paragraph and the paragraph’s controlling idea.
28. Anytime, you make major changes in any chapter, always go back to the introduction, summary, and conclusion, and let those reflect the new changes. Do not wait for the instructor to highlight the new problem.
29. Do not forget to also get the feedback from the URM. Address the issues highlighted on the paper by your chair and URM.
30. Look for similar issues throughout the document and address all issues. Not all issues where highlighted.
31. Are there two of you doing this study? Keep referring to “we” or “the researchers” or “our research” etc.? Dissertation is done by one student. Please revise appropriately. Also, do not use personal pronouns throughout the document.
32. APA issue: Work on APA reference style.
33. Writing from author to author, instead of from idea to idea is not advanced writing. Using one author does not provide a solid foundation nor varying perspectives for the point you are making.
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