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Ctreativewritingexercisepersonapoem.pdf

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Annotation Notes 1. This would be a fantastic opening line. 2. Below is another possibility for the opening:

No matter who, they all want me, Want to be like me. I'm Tina. I get a Lot of attention. Some people are Constantly looking my way. Others Are so envious they can't stop staring.

3. You are getting on a nice rhythmic roll in this section. 4. The formatting is a little curious in this section. 5. I love how you jump into Tina's mind and write from there, rather than narrating from your perception of Tina. From

Tina's mind, one could write about anything, so long as it is from Tina's perspective. 6. Great job with this poem, Travis! Try chiseling down the language anywhere you can without making the writing

grammatically incorrect or too cryptic. You bring the voice and personality of Tina out well in this poem. Very nice work!

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