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Annotation Notes 1. Single space poetry. 2. Watch out for cliche phrases. This line is not crucial to the poem and only states a cliche. It would be better to drop it. 3. met. 4. Little 5. "Hi." 6. Rather than trying to encompass the entire relationship in such sweeping strokes, try focsing on a particular moment

in time, like a snapshot. 7. Watch out for repetition. 8. Proofread once more for punctuation errors. 9. You're

10. encouragment 11. they're 12. Proofread once more for spelling errors. 13. us. 14. As you work on the revision, Travis, consider the turn in the poem. What is the poem driving at? What changes the

direction of the poem that helps it resonate for readers? Keep that in mind as you work on the revision.

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