English II

Overall, I think your sentences are clear. One area that may be able to expand on for clarification is within the first paragraph.

" Therefore, it is vital to identify the challenges that the clinicians and other medical personnel go through as they treat the mothers during this period. "

I'm not sure if I am reading this sentence incorrectly, but what kind of challenges do the clinicians and other medical personnel go through as they treat mothers? How will identifying those challenges be helpful?

Your paper reads well, some of the sentences are long. Though I did not see any misuse of commas, there are a lot of them throughout the draft because of how long some of the sentences are.

The paper is also grammatically sound from what I read so far. I did not catch any spelling errors, sentence fragments or verb errors. One of the things that's repeated throughout this course is to not use any personal pronouns in academic writing and so far you are in line with that.

Overall, I think you are doing well. Keep chipping away at it. Hopefully my feedback is helpful in some way.