POL201 Final Paper (I need this back by 8pm Central Standard Time 7/30/2018

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Paper Title: Controlled Substance Act of 1970 (Marshakie Applewhite)

No. of Pages: 6 Pages

Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Research

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: Grammar & Mechanics, Focus/Thesis Statement

Paper Goals: The assignment is to write a six-page paper on a government policy not counting

the title and reference pages. The paper is to adhere to the standards of the APA format.

Proofing Summary:

Hi Marshakie,

I’m Shawn, your composition tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have made several

suggestions that will help you revise. Please feel free to contact us through a live chat session with any follow-up

questions or for any clarification.

Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions as a starting

point for the revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the entire draft for minor errors, but

rather, focused on overall concerns such as idea development. For a complete look at your grammar and punctuation,

please use the Grammarly software available under “Writing Center” in your classroom.

You have done a nice job of constructing topic sentences that are fully developed and help introduce the reader to

the main focus of your body paragraphs. Also, there is good focus within your work as well as great flow. Great Job!

For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:

1. Thesis Statement

Your thesis statement should help introduce the reader to the main focus of your paper and it should also include

a list of supporting reasons for this main focus. In this case your main focus is related to the Controlled Substance

Act of 1970. Now the next step would be to also include a list of supporting reasons to let the reader know what all

of your paper's body paragraphs will discuss about this main focus within your paper's developing thesis statement:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/writing-a-thesis

2. Paragraph Development

Although, it is good to utilize lots of in-text citations in your paper. It is also important to be sure that all these in-text

citations are being properly incorporated into the text. The proper method for incorporating in-text citations is referred

to as the I.C.E. method. In this case you have introduced and cited the in-text citation and now the next step is to also

include a sentence after that helps to explain the relevance of this in-text citation to your paper's main argument. Refer

to the link below for some additional and further assistance with the development of your in-text citation incorporation:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/quoting-paraphrasing-summarizing

3. APA Formatting

According to the APA format the parenthesis at the end of an in-text citation should include the author's last name,

the date of publication, and the page number of the cited source. Refer to the link below for further assistance with

the development of all your in-text citations: http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/citing-within-your-paper

Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.

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Writing Consultant

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Your thesis statement should

help introduce the reader to

the main focus of your paper

and it should also include a

list of supporting reasons for

this main focus. In this case

your main focus is related to

the Controlled Substance Act

of 1970. Now the next step

would be to also include a

list of supporting reasons to

let the reader know what all

of your body paragraphs will

discuss about this main focus

within your thesis statement:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/writing-a-thesis

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The underlined topic sentence is

fully developed and it also does

a great job of helping to introduce

the reader to the main focus of

this current body paragraph.

According to the APA format the

parenthesis at the end of an in-text

citation should include the author's

last name, the date of publication,

and the page number of the cited

source. Refer to the link below for

further assistance with the

development of your paper's

in-text citation formatting:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/citing-within-your-paper

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Although, it is good to utilize lots of

in-text citations in your paper.

It is also important to be sure that all

of these in-text citations are being

properly incorporated into the text.

The proper method for incorporating

in-text citations is referred to as the

I.C.E. method. In this case you have

introduced and cited the in-text

citation and now the next step is to

also include a sentence after that

helps to explain the relevance of this

in-text citation to your paper's main

argument. Refer to the link below for

further assistance with developing

your in-text citation incorporation:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/quoting-paraphrasing-summarizing

The underlined topic sentence

is fully developed, and it also does

a great job of helping to introduce

the reader to the main focus of

the current body paragraph.

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According to the APA format the

parenthesis at the end of an in-text

citation should include the author's

last name, the date of publication,

and the page number of the cited

source. Refer to the link below for

further assistance with the

development of your paper's in-text

citation formatting:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/citing-within-your-paper

The underlined topic sentence is

fully developed, and it also does

a great job of helping to introduce

the reader to the main focus of

the current body paragraph.

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According to the APA format the

parenthesis at the end of an

in-text citation should include the

author's last name, the date of

publication, and the page number

of the cited source. Refer to the

link below for further assistance

with the development of your

paper's in-text citation formatting:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/citing-within-your-paper

The underlined topic sentence is

fully developed, and it also does

a great job of helping to introduce

the reader to the main focus of this

body paragraph.

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According to the APA format the

parenthesis at the end of an

in-text citation should include the

author's last name, the date of

publication, and the page number

of the cited source. Refer to the

link below for further assistance

with the development of your

paper's in-text citation formatting:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/citing-within-your-paper

The underlined topic sentence is

fully developed, and it also does

a great job of helping to introduce

the reader to the main focus of

this body paragraph.

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Your conclusion paragraph is fully

developed. It also does a great

job of helping to reiterate your

paper's main argument as well as

restating your paper's main points

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Be sure to italicize all volume

numbers when formatting all

of your papers references.

Be sure to italicize all volume numbers when formatting all of your papers references.

Refer to the link below for further assistance with the development of your references:

http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/format-your-reference-list

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Be sure to italicize all volume

numbers when formatting all

of your papers references.

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