condensed memo 2

CONDENSED MEMO 2

Revise the document below thusly:

(1) Produce a new document, approximately 250 words total (each paragraph approx. 25 – 75 words), conveying substantively the same message as the original, with 25 prepositions and be-verbs total.

(2) Next, produce one 100-word paragraph comprehensively conveying this document’s basic message, containing no more than 5 prepositions and be-verbs total.

(3) In both (1) and (2), you will underline every 1st 5, bolding each 1st 5’s keyword. For instance, this sentence underlines the 1st five and bolds the keyword. Bold two keywords per sentence if you cannot distinguish just one, but those keywords must appear in the 1st 5.

(4) Every paragraph (of 1 & 2) displays keyword consistency: most 1st 5s per paragraph reference or echo the same keyword or idea.

Problem prepositions: in, on, at, for, from, to

Problem be-verbs: is, be, been am, are, was, were

Situation: You run “Reap What You Sow,” a local food bank serving low-income households, whose operations, like all nonprofits, requires donations and volunteer time. You recently initiated a “Social Ambassador” volunteer program. Your social ambassador volunteers use social media to raise awareness, solicit donations, and attract future volunteers. You have found, however, that your recent social ambassadors lack commitment and consistency, their social media use falling significantly after a few months.

You therefore seek more dedicated long-term social ambassadors. You have crafted the message below, and will post it to your website, send to prior volunteers and through other social channels. Revise it.

Reap What You Sow Needs Volunteers

Are you someone who wants to change the world? With very little commitment of your time, you can be someone who catapults the life opportunities of kids and their families in our community. In the past few years, we have been using a new way of getting the word out about what it is that we do: social ambassadors. Social ambassadors are folks who help those in need get assistance, help increase donations, and who promote volunteerism. Last year our top social ambassadors made a huge impact. Across the board, every metric has been skyrocketing. Donations from our community increased so much that we are now in a position to serve many more families. On top of that, volunteer hours increased, and we were able to receive far more clothing donations. There are so many valuable skills and lessons that social ambassadors gain, from using social media for good causes to marketing, to excellent teamwork, to simply giving back to the community.

Unfortunately, about 20 percent or one in five people in our community is food insecure. Experts examine food insecurity in many ways, but their definitions generally coalesce around the idea that people not only don’t have enough money for food but it is also not healthy food they eat. This creates worry, embarrassment, hunger, and poor health. Those who are food insecure are generally in low-income households (under $300000), but that is not always the case. Surprise medical bills, extended family caretaking responsibilities, and sudden loss of employment are common reasons other households are affected. We worry the most about children. In all the research about food security, kids in food insecure households are much more likely in a path to poor school performance, much more likely in a condition of stress, and much more likely on the road to many lifelong challenges. More than ever, we’ve started to serve the senior citizen community, with nearly 15 percent of our clients who are retired without enough income for regular, nutritious meals and who often face extra challenges with diseases such as diabetes and high blood pressure and who need dietary guidance as a result.

A lot of people wonder exactly what we do. That is a fair question. In an effort to support people in need, we provide food in a well-balanced and nutritious manner. We have an on-site food pantry and a food pantry truck to provide delivery. We also serve hot meals on-site for breakfast, lunch, and dinner. The food bank bestows our clients with bountiful and sustainable food. In 2019, we served 2,152 households, 5,327 children were served, another 986 senior citizens were served, and altogether we served 23,887 meals! Our food bank is also a dietary guidance organization. Generally, impoverished families simply don’t have the wherewithal to procure healthy foods. We have done research that shows 83 percent of the people we serve usually purchase inexpensive unhealthy foods. As a result, many of our clients need more education about proper dietary needs. We also provide clothing assistance and give away books. We have helped thousands of members of the community get back on their feet. The charity watchdog group Charity Navigator has given us a perfect rating for the past five years because of our ability to serve our community with the resources we receive.

Social ambassadors are needed to help with promoting the food bank and raising donations. They use social media to share information about food insecurity in our community. Most of our social ambassadors are also volunteers at the food bank for at least one shift (three hours) per month so they have their own personal experiences working with clients.

To help you succeed, we provide you with many resources so you can complete your role effectively. Needless to say, you receive training about how to influence your followers on Facebook, Instagram, LinkedIn, Twitter, and other social sites. Social ambassadors are given weekly tips, suggestions, and examples about how to increase impact each and every week. They are also given content to post and suggestions for how to personalize it. By being in attendance at the monthly social ambassador meeting, there is a lot that can be learned about running a nonprofit. To apply to serve as a social ambassador, email Al Jorgenson at [email protected].