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Compare and Contrast ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

link.bu.edu Internet Source

FINAL GRADE

65/100 Compare and Contrast GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Good work maintaining focus throughout the essay.

However, there are a few areas that require your attention.

The points you stated in your thesis statement are your claims. All claims should be supported by credible sources in the body paragraphs.

Each body paragraph has a specific order. You state your claim in the first sentence of the paragraph (topic sentence). You explain your claim, and then add your sources to support your claim. Now, explain the source and connect it with your claim. End the body paragraph with a concluding statement.

There are LOC errors in the essay too. I have marked the first instance of the errors. Please check the whole essay for similar errors.

Detailed comments are in the essay. Do go through them. Good luck with your course.

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Hi,

I am happy to review your essay today.

Extra space | Format

Oops, please be sure to turn off the Space Before/After Paragraph option in the Paragraph section of your MS Word toolbar. Be sure Word is not adding a space before and/or after a paragraph or other parts where you select Enter to start a new line by making sure the Line Spacing section shows "Add Space Before Paragraph" and "Add Space After Paragraph" at the bottom. If either says "Remove" at the beginning instead of "Add," please click those that say "Remove."

If either one of these two is on, you'll likely notice an extra spac

Comment 1 | Format

The assignment type is already mentioned in the heading. You can avoid this part in the title.

Comment 2 | Punctuation

Capitalize "Old" and "New" throughout. They are proper nouns.

Comment 3 | Language

Awkward: Check this construction.

Introduction | Coherence

An introduction should capture your reader’s attention. It alerts the reader about the central issue of the paper. Provide background information about the topic, and why it is relevant. Hook your reader's attention to your essay.

Remember to state your opinion about the topic and not somebody else’s. Add your sources in the body paragraphs.

Click here to learn more about writing introductions.

Additional Comment

The thesis statement should be the last line of the introduction.

Comment 4 | Thesis

Good work adding the differentiating aspects in the thesis.

Comment 5 | Format

Avoid subheadings. They are given in the essay instructions to guide you on how to write this essay.

how to write topic sent | Coherence

A topic sentence is the most important sentence in a paragraph. It should address one of the claims

presented in your thesis statement. Click here to learn how to write topic sentences.

Indent | Format

As per MLA format, you have to place an indent of one half-inch from the left margin in the first line of each paragraph. Hit the "Tab" key to place the indent.

who vs that vs which | Language

"Who" refers to a person, and "that" refers to a thing or a concept.

Using "that" as a relative pronoun to refer to a person is acceptable in informal language, but in formal usage use "who."

Check here for the difference between "who," "that," and "which."

SV agreement | Grammar

Check the Subject-Verb agreement here. A singular noun takes a singular form of the verb, and a plural noun takes a plural verb.

E.g., "The girl dances." "The girls dance."

Additional Comment

The verb agrees with the subject. The subject here is "one."

Comment 6 | Research/MLA

Support your claims with sources.

body paras | Support & Dev

The first sentence of your body paragraph is called a topic sentence. You introduce one of the claims you made in your thesis statement in the first sentence. Explain your claim in 2-3 sentences. Provide evidence for your claim using reliable sources. Explain how your evidence helps to prove your claim right. Reiterate your claim in the last sentence of your body paragraph. Ensure that you follow this pattern for all your body paragraphs. Refer to this link for more details on how to write paragraphs.

Click on this link to learn the best ways to form body paragraphs for argumentative essays.

Comment 7 | Punctuation

Missing comma: A comma is used toward the end of a sentence when there is an element at the end of a sentence used for emphasis or added information. E.g., It was the best option, given her situation.

concl. sent of a para | Coherence

E l i f l i

Ensure that your concluding sentence of a body paragraph sums up the claim that you have discussed in that paragraph. Do not include new claims there.

SV agreement | Grammar

Check the Subject-Verb agreement here. A singular noun takes a singular form of the verb, and a plural noun takes a plural verb.

E.g., "The girl dances." "The girls dance."

Additional Comment

Here, the subject is "teachings and practices." Hence, use the plural form of the verb.

Check for subject-verb agreements throughout.

No ";" | Punctuation Unnecessary semicolon: Semicolons are commonly used to join closely related, complete sentences that do not contain coordinating conjunctions or commas as connectors. Semicolons are also placed before words like "however" and "therefore" when such words are used to join sentences. Additional Comment

We use introductory commas in the clauses or phrases that come before main clause.

how to in-text | Research/MLA

Click here to learn how signal phrases should be used as per MLA format. Also, click here to learn how in-text citations are to be done.

Additional Comment

Add the author's last name in the parenthesis. Make this change throughout.

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Support & Develop | Support & Dev

Each body paragraph should analyze the idea that you have presented with the help of your sources. You should include your own comments and explanations to the idea. The last sentence of the body paragraph should summarize your idea in the paragraph. These are essential.

Awk. | Language Awkward: The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 8 | Grammar

Fragment: This is a phrase. You want a subordinate clause to go with the main clause in the rest of the sentence.

Comment 9 | Support & Dev

Add sources to provide credibility to your claim.

Comment 10 | Support & Dev

These are claims that you have about the New Testament. These should be supported with relevant sources.

Needs topic | Coherence Needs topic sentence: A well-organized paragraph supports or develops a central idea. The topic sentence should explain the thesis of the paragraph and unify the content of the rest of the paragraph.

Comment 11 | Language

Word error: "Himself" is one word.

Sp. | Language Spelling error

Comment 12 | Language

Repetitive: See how the phrase "for instance" is used twice in the same sentence. Try modifying the sentence.

concl. sent of a para | Coherence

Ensure that your concluding sentence of a body paragraph sums up the claim that you have discussed in that paragraph. Do not include new claims there.

Comment 13 | Language

Wrong word use: Check the last word of the sentence. Did you mean to use another word?

Comment 14 | Grammar

Add relative pronoun to show the connection.

Prep. | Grammar Incorrect preposition: Some words must be used together with certain prepositions in order to create the meaning you intend. For example, to yell "to" someone is different from yelling "at" someone. Some confusion results from words such as "compare," which usually takes the preposition "to" when it refers to describing the resemblances between things that are not similar, and takes the preposition "with" when it describes the resemblances between things that are similar. Additional Comment

Check what preposition goes with the word "depend."

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informal words | Language

Avoid informal words like "things" and "stuff" in your academic essays. Use specific words to express your ideas.

Conclusion | Coherence

Refer to these links to learn how to formulate a proper conclusion.

Link 1

Link 2

Restate your thesis and sum up your arguments in the concluding paragraph. Take care not to add new points to the conclusion.

Comment 15 | Format

Add "Works Cited" as a separate page.

Comment 16 | Punctuation

This is the title of the new page. Avoid punctuations.

Comment 17 | Research/MLA

Check the format of the entries.

Last Name, First Name. Title of Book. City of Publication, Publisher, Publication Date.

alphabetical arrangement | Research/MLA

Good work arranging the entries alphabetically by the author’s last name.

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THESIS (20%)

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SUPPORT & DEV (15%)

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3.25 / 5

5 / 5

Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions

Thesis or potential thesis is neither present in any portion of the essay, nor is it implied in any manner. Thesis may be present but incorrect for the assignment’s objectives/approach. Thesis may be present but the submission overall fails to meet most assignment objectives (such as the essay is only a paragraph) that determining the thesis’ viability is problematic.

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.

Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.

Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples.

Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.

3 / 5

Thesis support, thesis development, use of examples, logic, and reason

Support is more than lacking, such that it is insufficient for review (assignment does not meet length requirements). Body paragraphs may be very limited in original material for evaluation due to too much borrowed information and a problematic similarity report which qualifies the paper for an account hold and “similarity match: low” QuickMark.

No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic development.

Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning.

More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. More development needed for supporting reasons or evidence. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis.

Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some minor way. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs.

POINTS (5)

COHERENCE (15%)

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LANGUAGE (10%)

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Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis.

3 / 5

Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences

Two or more major organizational elements are missing, such as an introduction and conclusion. Essay be one long paragraph with no discernible separation of ideas.

No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.

Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.

Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.

Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization.

Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.

2 / 5

Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary

May contain more than 8 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 8 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate clarity in most sentences throughout the paper. The lack of lucidity makes it difficult for the reader to determine the paper’s focus.

May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.

May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

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PUNCTUATION (10%)

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POINTS

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.

May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.

May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.

3 / 5

Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement

Contains more than 7 different grammar errors. The identical 5+ errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

3 / 5

Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors

Contains more than 7 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 5+ errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

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FORMAT (10%)

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Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

2 / 5

heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for compare/contrast: 500 words minimum

Format or word minimum is completely lacking. Formatting may be missing five or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, and/or thesis not underlined). Essay is severely underdeveloped, such that it includes only a paragraph or two.

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements. Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements. Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements

Meets some formatting requirements. Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)

Meets most formatting requirements. Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of at least 500 words.

Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of at least 500 words.

3.50 / 5

Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list *This paper requires at least two sources.

Sources are neither present on the Works Cited page nor employed in the paper. No attempt or implied intention to use sources. At least seven different errors in documenting sources. Similarity report may present potential plagiarism concerns, so much so that grading the paper is acceptable but the paper must be placed on an account hold due to qualifying for the “similarity match: low” QuickMark.

Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list.

POINTS (3)

POINTS (3.50)

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Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.

Source minimum requirements (two credible sources) are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed.

Source minimum requirements (two credible sources) are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.

Source minimum requirements (two credible sources) are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.