COMP 2 ETHNOGRAPHY PAPER (LEADERSHIP)

COMP 1013 ETHONOGRAPHY PAPER LANDON LI.docx

by Landon Li

Submission date: 22-Jun-2021 01:59PM (UTC-0500) Submission ID: 1610742826 File name: COMP_1013_ETHONOGRAPHY_PAPER_LANDON_LI.docx (21.74K) Word count: 1514 Character count: 8377

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COMP 1013 ETHONOGRAPHY PAPER LANDON LI.docx ORIGINALITY REPORT

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FINAL GRADE

25/25 COMP 1013 ETHONOGRAPHY PAPER LANDON LI.docx GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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best its 

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Consider revising to say something like, "Effective leaders help themselves..." or "Good leaders help themselves..." 

Not all leaders are effective, and some of them don't do the right things. 

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You need a stronger thesis statement here--what can we learn about human culture, group dynamics, or behavior as a result of studying leaders? 

Consider focusing the paper on a specific group/type of leader--there are so many examples of leaders. The topic right now is too broad. What about studying only business leaders? 

Comment 5

Introduce some real people. Tell stories about actual people in leadership roles. Use their names and make them "come alive" as characters. 

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Give some examples. Talk about real people. 

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Give some examples--tell us some stories about leaders who had these characteristics. 

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One strategy would be to compare/contrast some effective and ineffective leaders. Talk about some actual people who have been effective as leaders, and contrast those stories with stories of people who have failed as leaders. 

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This is a well-written paper. Your writing is clear and easy to read, and the paper is well- organized. However, right now this is a paper about the topic of leadership, but it's not really an ethnography paper. People need to be more of a focus. Tell stories about actual people. Use their names. I would recommend focusing on a smaller group of leaders. I think your topic is too broad. The humans themselves--people who you'd describe as leaders--need to be more of a focus. Work on that as you prepare the final draft. 

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