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Professor Baker

ENGL 1301-61025

September 21, 2017

Economic Grievances in Declaration of Independence

The Declaration of Independence was the written document in which the thirteen

colonies signed the twenty-seven grievance and announced their independence from Great

Britain. It was assumed finally on July 4, 1776 (Gilje, “Declaration of Independence”). It took

more than a year for the process to complete because of the outbreak of the American

Revolutionary War. Thomas Jefferson was the man who wrote the Declaration of Independence.

He was known as a founding father of America because he was dedicated to the settlers’ issues.

The Declaration justified colonial independence by asserting the natural rights of people. In this

document, twenty-seven grievances were written against King George III, regarding various

concerns. The King cut off the trade between the colonies and other parts of the world and

imposed unjust taxes on the settlers. Three taxes that caused economic hardships were the Tea

Act, the Sugar Act, and the Stamp Act. These hardships were the one of the main among the

reasons for the drafting of the Declaration of Independence.

There are were several causes which prompted the American Revolution. The one most

noticeable in the prevalent judgment is was the "expense on tea," forced by Great Britain on her

American states (Drake). “Tea Leaves”) This act was passed on May 10, 1773; it was a law

allowing the British East India Company to cheaply sell its tea to the American colonies. The

main reasons to implement this law were to undercut the American tea smuggling and to

financially helped the British East India Company. from breaking down. Although the British

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hoped to gain profit from this law, but there were was widespread opposition from people such

as merchants and New Englanders who were against of this law. A great conflict roused between

them where “the colonists tried to prevent the consignees from accepting taxed tea and were

successful in New York and Philadelphia” (“Boston Tea Party”). At Boston, three tea ships

arrived and stayed emptied, Thomas Hutchinson declined to pay the tax. A gathering of rankled

pioneers, driven by Samuel Adams, Paul Revere, and others, camouflaged themselves as Native

Americans, boarded the boats the evening of Dec. 16, 1773 and tossed the tea into the harbor. In

this way, this act lead for Americans independences.

The British Crown, ever on the look for new wellsprings of seeking additional income,

started to imposed a tax on molasses in the colonies under British control. The Molasses Act

began in 1733. “With debt from the French & Indian War to repay, the Crown passed the Sugar

Act of 1764. This reinvigorated the act of 1733 and put duties on all molasses and sugar

imported to the colonies” (Guthrie). “Molasses”) Even though not as generally published as tax

on tea, the choice by the Crown minister to charge the importation of molasses was a critical

piece of fuel to the flares of revolution. US As the American colonies already having

experienced economic crises, and these British activities taxes pulled them in more economic

depression. This act was implemented without involvement of American people, so American

people become more resistance to follow this law, which lead led to the American Revolution

and helped to bring independence in colonial America. USA.

The parliament declared another tax law, known as the Stamp Act, called “stamp act” on

March 22, 1765. “The first direct tax to be levied on the American colonies, it required that all

newspapers, pamphlets, legal documents, commercial bills, advertisements, and other papers

issued in the colonies bear a stamp” (“Stamp Act”). The stamp act made the colonists more

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upset not because of money but this was another law imposed without consulting them.

Americans begun to protested for this law, they didn’t agree to pay tax, they stop buying things

having merchandise that required a stamp, on it and repeated the word phrase: “taxation without

representation” everywhere Some colonies sent letters to the parliament regarding the law, some

sent long petitions asking request to the King George III to change the stamp law. But the

parliament and king didn’t did not give more attention to the colonists. Thus, 13 the thirteen

colonies held the meeting and acted against the new tax law – for this they create the Stamp Act

Congress. “the stamp act congress”. The parliament repealed the Stamp act – when it saw the

anger of colonists and got to know about the Stamp Act Congress. To prove that the British had

authority upon over the colonies, they the king sent 9,000 British soldiers in 13 to the thirteen

colonies. This make the colonists more anger and held a war between them. This is another step

toward revolution and American independence.

In conclusion, it is proven that each grievance written by Thomas Jefferson about the

economic concern are the steps toward the American revolution and their independence from

Great Britain. There are difference grievances regarding economic concerns, among all the most

important were trading and taxing, which made the American colonists to think about their

freedom and built their own world. Hence, the tea acts, sugar acts, and stamp acts are the

economic leading acts for the process of “Declaration of Independence”.

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Works Cited

"Boston Tea Party." Columbia Electronic Encyclopedia, 6Th Edition, Mar. 2017, p. 1.

“Declaration of Independence.” Making the Revolution: America, 1763-1791: Primary Source

Collection. National Humanities Center: Second Continental Congress, Declaration of

independence,1776.

Drake, Francis Samuel, ed. Tea Leaves: Being a Collection of Letters and Documents Relating to

the Shipment of Tea to the American Colonies in the Year 1773, by the East India Tea

Company. Now First Printed from the Original Manuscript. Boston: AO Crane, 1884.

Gilje, Paul A. “Declaration of Independence.” Encyclopedia of American History, Vol. 3,

Revised Edition, Facts on File, 2009. American History.

Guthrie, Margaret E. "Molasses." Early American Homes, vol. 30, no. 1, Feb. 1999, p. 60.

"Stamp Act." Columbia Electronic Encyclopedia, 6Th Edition, Mar. 2017, p. 1.