Eng Comp 102 Essays

Cartoon Analysis by Aakanksha Bhargava

Submission date: 11-Oct-2019 09:46PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1191178977 File name: ww_moodle_temp_turnitintool_51838420.Paper1-CartoonAnalysis.docx (101.07K) Word count: 531 Character count: 2600

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1/1 Cartoon Analysis GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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Hi Aakanksha Bhargava,

Some interesting insights and details here in your analysis. The areas of strength are highlighted in green, and areas needing improvement are highlighted in red.

To strengthen this writing assignment, please practice reducing the passive voice and tighten up sentence structure and clarity.

Visit this site to practice different aspects of composition. https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/

best, AH

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Additional Comment

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Title | Format

Try a catchier title.

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Sometimes the use of passive voice can create awkward sentences. An overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can cause your prose to seem flat and uninteresting. Use of the passive voice is not a grammatical error. It’s a stylistic issue that pertains to clarity—that is, there are times when using the passive voice can prevent a reader from understanding what you mean.

Learn more about the passive voice from this video: https://youtu.be/x5S4YqVWJ1Y

P/V2 | Language

Sometimes the use of passive voice can create awkward sentences. An overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can cause your prose to seem flat and uninteresting. Use of the passive voice is not a grammatical error. It’s a stylistic issue that pertains to clarity—that is, there are times when using the passive voice can prevent a reader from understanding what you mean.

Learn more about the passive voice from this video: https://youtu.be/x5S4YqVWJ1Y

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Try a catchier hook. Use either a question, proverb, quote, or anecdote.

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No italics for quotes.

Support | Support Support Needed: A well-written paper will include strong support for its thesis. Support for your thesis should come from primary (original documents, interviews, and personal experiences) and secondary (information that has been processed or interpreted by someone else) sources. To use your support effectively, you must elaborate upon the information, quotations, and examples taken from your sources and connect them to your thesis. It is also important to remember to cite the sources of the evidence and support you use in your paper. Additional Comment

Good here.

P/V2 | Language

Sometimes the use of passive voice can create awkward sentences. An overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can cause your prose to seem flat and uninteresting. Use of the passive voice is not a grammatical error. It’s a stylistic issue that pertains to clarity—that is, there are times when using the passive voice can prevent a reader from understanding what you mean.

Learn more about the passive voice from this video: https://youtu.be/x5S4YqVWJ1Y

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P/V2 | Language

Sometimes the use of passive voice can create awkward sentences. An overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can cause your prose to seem flat and uninteresting. Use of the passive voice is not a grammatical error. It’s a stylistic issue that pertains to clarity—that is, there are times when using the passive voice can prevent a reader from understanding what you mean.

Learn more about the passive voice from this video: https://youtu.be/x5S4YqVWJ1Y

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P/V2 | Language

Sometimes the use of passive voice can create awkward sentences. An overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can cause your prose to seem flat and uninteresting. Use of the passive voice is not a grammatical error. It’s a stylistic issue that pertains to clarity—that is, there are times when using the passive voice can prevent a reader from understanding what you mean.

Learn more about the passive voice from this video: https://youtu.be/x5S4YqVWJ1Y

Support | Support Support Needed: A well-written paper will include strong support for its thesis. Support for your thesis should come from primary (original documents, interviews, and personal experiences) and secondary (information that has been processed or interpreted by someone else) sources. To use your support effectively, you must elaborate upon the information, quotations, and examples taken from your sources and connect them to your thesis. It is also important to remember to cite the sources of the evidence and support you use in your paper. Additional Comment

Develop this paragraph.

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P/V2 | Language

Sometimes the use of passive voice can create awkward sentences. An overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can cause your prose to seem flat and uninteresting. Use of the passive voice is not a grammatical error. It’s a stylistic issue that pertains to clarity—that is, there are times when using the passive voice can prevent a reader from understanding what you mean.

Learn more about the passive voice from this video: https://youtu.be/x5S4YqVWJ1Y

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Avoid punctuation errors.

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Place the period inside the quote.

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RUBRIC: ENG102V3CARTOON ANALYSIS_DRAFT

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Thesis & Focus: Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.

Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.

Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples.

Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.

Above Average

Support & Development: Thesis support, thesis development, Techniques illustrated in cartoon, Physical elements of cartoon, use of examples, logic, and reason

No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. Little-to-no techniques illustrated in the cartoon are addressed. Little-to-no description of cartoon’s physical elements is present. Topic development is flawed or non-existent.

Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Techniques illustrated in the cartoon may be partially missing or addressed ineffectively. Description of cartoon’s physical elements may be partially missing or addressed ineffectively. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning.

More support is needed. Techniques illustrated in the cartoon may be addressed in a way that lacks clarity. Some description of cartoon’s physical elements may be lacking clarity and thesis support. Most evidence supports thesis.

Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. The techniques illustrated in the cartoon are addressed but perhaps not always effectively. Description of cartoon’s physical elements is present and mostly supports the thesis. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs.

Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. The techniques illustrated in the cartoon are analyzed very effectively. Description of cartoon’s physical elements is clear and supports the thesis. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis.

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Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences

No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.

Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.

Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.

Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization.

Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.

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Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary

May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.

May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.

May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.

May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain

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1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little- to-no unnecessary repetition.

Above Average

Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement

Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

Above Average

Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

Above Average

Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for cartoon analysis is 500 words minimum

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

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RESEARCH

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Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)

Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 500 words.

Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 500 words.

Superior

This paper requires students to document their cartoon source. Incorporation of sources in the body of the paper is not required. If any optional/additional sources are used, those should be documented properly on the Works Cited page.

Source minimum requirements (documentation of cartoon source) may not be met. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly.

Source minimum requirements (documentation of cartoon source) may not be met. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.

Source minimum requirements (documentation of cartoon source) are met. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed.

Source minimum requirements (documentation of cartoon source) are met. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.

Source minimum requirements (documentation of cartoon source) are met. Works Cited page contains almost no errors, and all sources are clearly listed.