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CW 1 Car Industry and AI by Victoria Stephenson

Submission date: 03-Jan-2020 12:53PM (UTC+0000) Submission ID: 1239134764 File name: 14900_Victoria_Stephenson_CW_1_Car_Industry_and_AI_278016_1651532176.docx (39.1K) Word count: 2448 Character count: 13114

Overall structure looks clear, but what is the main focus of paragraph 5?

Non-academic source

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Pt 1. Search method issue 1

This is not the title of the article - it is 'Driving Tests Coming for Autonomous Cars'. Make sure your referencing is accurate.

Pt 1. Search method issue

This article does not come up on a Google Scholar search.

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FINAL GRADE

60/100 CW 1 Car Industry and AI GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Source Selection: 6 (One merit criteria met; two of the sources are less academic)

Source Evaluation and Use of Sources: 7 (Both Merit criteria met)

Processing Text: 6.5 (mid-mark) One Distinction criteria met - main points are all clear, support is repetitive / less clear in places - make sure you give specific examples / data).

Research and Understanding: 4.5 - mid-mark awarded. Search methods are unclear / could not be followed. Conclusions are good and clearly indicate reading has been undertaken and understood.

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Text Comment. Overall structure looks clear, but what is the main focus of paragraph 5?

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Non-academic source

Remember that your sources must be reliable/trustworthy. This means they should be books, academic journal articles, or reports from governments or international organisations. Do not use general websites as primary sources.

Referencing error

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Check the guidelines on the cover page of this submission template to make sure you have formatted the reference accurately.

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Pt 1. Search method issue

You have not explained where you found your source or have used a non-academic search engine. This is not good practice for academic study; please use either Google Scholar, StarPlus or the reference lists of other related academic papers.

Comment 1

Google Scholar would be a better starting point, or you could follow up on research cited in the website article to make sure that the research is academic and non-biased.

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Text Comment. This is not the title of the article - it is 'Driving Tests Coming for Autonomous Cars'. Make sure your referencing is accurate.

Pt 1. Search method issue

You have not explained where you found your source or have used a non-academic search engine. This is not good practice for academic study; please use either Google Scholar, StarPlus or the reference lists of other related academic papers.

Text Comment. This article does not come up on a Google Scholar search.

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Good source selection

This is a reliable and relevant source.

Referencing error

Check the guidelines on the cover page of this submission template to make sure you have formatted the reference accurately.

Pt 2. Clear source evaluation

You have fully explained the currency, authority and accuracy of this source.

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Pt 2. Good, clear indication of how source will be used.

Comment 2

Make sure you are supporting, not repeating your main point.

Pt 2. Good, clear support provided

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Good source selection

This is a reliable and relevant source.

Pt 2. Clear source evaluation

You have fully explained the currency, authority and accuracy of this source.

Pt 2. Good, clear indication of how source will be used.

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Pt 2. Good, clear point

This point is clearly relevant to your essay question and is well paraphrased.

Pt 2. Good, clear support provided

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Good point / s

RUBRIC: CW1 RUBRIC FINAL

SOURCE SEL A)

FAIL: 0 - 1

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

SOURCE SEL B)

FAIL: 0 - 1

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

SOURCE EVA A)

FAIL: 0 - 1

Pass: 4 - 5

a) Number and credibility of sources included in the list * The references provided for all 5 sources

a) Poor and/or inappropriate literature/material selected; required number of sources not included. * You need 5 correctly referenced academic sources: journal articles, books or reports from governments or international organisations.

a) Predominantly poor and/or inappropriate material selected with selection appearing to be random. * You need 5 correctly referenced academic sources: journal articles, books or reports from governments or international organisations.

a) Acceptable sources selected; two sources may be of lower quality / lack currency. * Check that all your references are accurate and from academic sources: journal articles, books or reports from governments or international organisations.

a) Reliable sources selected overall; one source may be of lower quality. * Check that all your references are accurate and from academic sources: journal articles, books or reports from governments or international organisations.

a) All five sources included in the list are reliable and appropriate for academic purposes.

Merit: 6 - 7

b) Relevance of sources to title * Part 1: This source is relevant because…

b) Texts are unconnected – no obvious focus for the reading. * Your sources’ titles must be related to your essay question. You should explain how the information in these sources is connected to the question.

b) Texts are only generally linked to the topic; the relevance to the title is unclear. * Your sources’ titles must be related to your essay question. You should explain how the information in these sources is connected to the question.

b) Texts are relevant to the research topic and title, though link may be less clear in places. * Explain clearly how the information in these sources is related to your essay question.

b) The relevance of the texts to the research topic and title is made clear. * Add more detail related to how the information in the sources is connected to your essay question

b) Relevance of all texts to the research topic and title is made explicit and is clear.

Merit: 6 - 7

a) Evaluation of sources * Part 2: Currency, Authority, Accuracy

a) No attempt to evaluate the reliability of sources. * Look at the model answer in the CW 1 Assessment Brief for examples of how to evaluate the reliability of all three sources in part 2.

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

SOURCE EVA B)

FAIL: 0 - 1

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

PROC. TEXT A)

FAIL: 0 - 1

a) Weak / faulty evaluation of the reliability of the sources. * Look at the model answer in the CW 1 Assessment Brief for examples of how to evaluate the reliability of all three sources in part 2.

a) Evaluation of the reliability of the sources present, but provides minimal detail which is weak, faulty or repetitive in some areas. * Provide more detail about the currency, authority and accuracy of all three sources in part 2. Make sure you have included an explanation of how you know the source is relevant and reliable, rather than just stating the year of publication or the job of the author.

a) Sound evaluation of the reliability of sources; reasoning and detail may be clearer for some sources than others. * Provide more detail about the currency, authority and accuracy of all three sources in part 2. Make sure you have included an explanation of how you know the source is relevant and reliable, rather than just stating the year of publication or the job of the author.

a) Clear and sound evaluation of the reliability of all sources provided.

Merit: 6 - 7

b) Use of sources * Part 2: Which point will the information and arguments from the text be used to support or explain?

b) Unclear why sources have been selected, and how they will be used in the essay. * Write the paragraph number from your ‘plan for overall structure’ that the information in the sources relates to (eg. P3) and explain how this source will be used to support this paragraph.

b) Largely unclear how sources will be used to support points in the research essay. * Write the paragraph number from your ‘plan for overall structure’ that the information in the sources relates to (eg.P3) and explain how this source will be used to support this paragraph.

b) Indication of how sources will be used in the essay is generally clear, but may lack detail or relevance in places. * You have made it clear where and how you are going to use one of your sources. Add more detail to this section

b) Clear indication of how two of the sources will be used in research essay; sources appropriate to support points. * You have made it clear where and how you are going to use two of your sources. Add more detail for the third source.

b) Clear indication of how all three sources will be used in research essay; sources appropriate to support points outlined in essay plan.

Distinction: 8 - 10

a) Identification of key relevant points in the text. * Part 2: Relevant points from the text

a) Does not demonstrate the ability to identify main ideas from an academic text – either academic texts are not used, points are unclear, or are completely lifted. * Choose 3 main points from each source. They must be relevant to the topics of your body paragraphs.

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

PROC. TEXT B)

FAIL: 0 - 1

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

RES.&UND. A)

FAIL: 0 - 1

Remember to use your own words!

a) Demonstrates limited ability to identify main lines of argument in an academic text; main points are missing, unclear, repetitive or lifted. * Choose 3 main points from each source. They must be relevant to the topics of your body paragraphs. Remember to use your own words!

a) Demonstrates some ability to identify main lines of argument in an academic text; some points may be clearer than others. * You have identified some relevant points but they are not all clear. All main points must be relevant to your body paragraph topics and expressed clearly in your own words.

a) Demonstrates ability to identify main lines of argument in academic texts with the majority of points clearly relevant and clearly expressed. * You have identified relevant points but more specific detail is needed for some of them. Make sure all your main points are expressed clearly.

a) Demonstrates ability to identify main lines of argument in all three academic texts; all points are clearly relevant and clearly expressed.

Pass: 4 - 5

b) Identification of relevant supporting evidence provided in the text. * Part 2: Supporting evidence / example / data from the text

b) No attempt to provide supporting information; information is missing, irrelevant or inappropriate. * All the main points you include must have clearly linked supporting information. This support can be examples, data or results from studies. Remember to paraphrase and add citations.

b) Attempt to provide supporting information for main points, but largely unclear or repetitive; points are lifted from texts. * All the main points you include must have clearly linked supporting information. This support can be examples, data or results from studies. Remember to paraphrase and add citations.

b) Distinguishes supporting details from main points although some supporting evidence may be less clear or relevant. * Check that all the supporting information is relevant to the main point and add more detail (examples, data or results from studies). Remember to add citations. You may need to check the quality of your paraphrasing!

b) Provides clear supporting information relevant to the main points in a text. * Add more detail to improve this mark (examples, data or results from studies). Remember to add citations. You may need to check the quality of your paraphrasing!

b) Produces effective notes on relevant supporting ideas and details.

Below Pass: 2 - 3

a) Evidence of ability to research * Part 1: I found this source by…

a) No evidence of ability to find relevant and reliable sources demonstrated. * Explain how

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

RES.&UND. B)

FAIL: 0 - 1

BELOW PASS: 2 - 3

PASS: 4 - 5

MERIT: 6 - 7

DISTINCTION: 8 - 10

you found your sources in Part 1. Eg. Where did you search, what search terms did you use? Make sure you have used a valid search technique (not ‘I googled it’). Show evidence of more than one search technique. Check the CW 1 Model for examples.

a) Lacking evidence of ability to find relevant and reliable source; search method is unclear, inappropriate or repetitive. * Explain how you found your sources in Part 1. Eg. Where did you search, what search terms did you use? Make sure you have used a valid search technique (not ‘I googled it’). Show evidence of more than one search technique. Check the CW 1 Model for examples.

a) Some evidence of ability to find relevant and reliable sources demonstrated; more than one search method has been used. * Give more detail about how you found your sources in Part 1. How did you refine your search results? Eg. Change the data range, use different key words? How did you make sure you weren’t following up on research that all presented the same position on a topic?

a) Evidence of ability to find relevant and reliable sources demonstrated; effective search methods used and outlined. * Give a little more detail about how you found your sources in Part 1. How did you refine your search results? E.g. Change the data range, use alternative key words? Check the CW1 model in the assessment brief.

a) Clear evidence of ability to find relevant and reliable sources demonstrated; effective search methods used and fully outlined.

Merit: 6 - 7

b) Evidence of subject knowledge * Part 2: Conclusions drawn from you reading

b) Demonstrates no discernible knowledge or understanding. * Use the ‘conclusions drawn from your reading’ section to show that you understand key issues related to the essay question that you identified from the sources. Remember to use your own words; do not copy and paste from texts.

b) Demonstrates little or confused understanding of content; student has simply lifted text and / or has only covered one aspect of the title. * Use the ‘conclusions drawn from your reading’ section to show that you understand key issues related to the essay question that you identified from the sources. Remember to use your own words; do not copy and paste from texts.

b) Demonstrates general knowledge and coverage of some areas but need development. * There is some good evidence of knowledge and understanding of the topic, but write clearer conclusions drawn from your reading to show you understand the key issues related to your essay question that you have found in your reading. Remember to use your own words; do not copy and paste from texts.

b) Demonstrates good understanding and coverage of the relevant material and issues. * Good evidence of knowledge and understanding of the topic, but write clearer conclusions drawn from your reading to show that you understand the key issues related to your essay question that you have found from your sources. Remember to paraphrase all information in your CW1.

b) Demonstrates thorough understanding and coverage of the relevant material and

issues.