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Capstone Project Part 2.docx by Martina Briceno Puma

Submission date: 26-Jun-2022 07:49PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1863286226 File name: Capstone_Project_Part_2.docx (19.36K) Word count: 898 Character count: 4765

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12% SIMILARITY INDEX

8% INTERNET SOURCES

4% PUBLICATIONS

12% STUDENT PAPERS

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Capstone Project Part 2.docx ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

link.springer.com Internet Source

Submitted to Purdue University Student Paper

Submitted to CSU Northridge Student Paper

www.cbsnews.com Internet Source

Submitted to American International School, Kuwait Student Paper

Submitted to Liberty University Student Paper

FINAL GRADE

88/100 Capstone Project Part 2.docx GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Please review the comment bubbles in the body of the essay for additional feedback on how to improve on the next assignment. 

Focus - good focus, but need to detail a singular event to and talk about the coverage locally

 

Analysis - you do not identify a singular incident to give evaluation about local coverage. Would like more analysis into movements that are triggered through media violence coverage.

 

Sources - good references; missing a few citations

 

Format -need running header

Word choice - watch the awkward phrasing throughout

 

Mechanics – watch the passive voice; good introduction

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Comment 1

Is there a specific event to cite?  

Comment 2

awkward phrasing

Proofread This part of the sentence contains an error or misspelling that makes your meaning unclear.

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Comment 3

need a better transition

Comment 4

good, need citation

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Comment 5

better transition to talk about global comparison/coverage.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active voice.

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P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active voice.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

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RUBRIC: CAPSTONE PROJECT RUBRIC

FOCUS/PURPOSE (25%)

MEETS EXPECTATIONS (100)

NEEDS MINOR EDITING (90)

NEEDS REVISION (80)

NEEDS MAJOR EDITING (70)

MISSED THE MARK (60)

INCOMPLETE (0)

ANALYSIS (25%)

MEETS EXPECTATIONS (100)

NEEDS MINOR EDITING (90)

NEEDS REVISION (80)

NEEDS MAJOR EDITING (70)

MISSED THE MARK (60)

INCOMPLETE (0)

SOURCES (20%)

MEETS EXPECTATIONS (100)

NEEDS MINOR EDITING (90)

88 / 100

90 / 100

Addresses all questions that were proposed in assignment. Topic is well-focused and is supported by details. Writing is concise and clear.

Main idea is clear but missing minor details. Writing is still well structured and ideas are properly conveyed.

Writing is acceptable but could use some work. One question that was proposed was not answered. Main idea needs further development.

Two or more proposed questions were not answered. Paragraphs don't flow well or they are not fully developed.

Writing is difficult to follow. Thoughts are not clear or jumbled. Two or more proposed questions were not answered.

Element was not attempted or poorly executed. Similarity index is way too high.

90 / 100

Critical analysis is present and provides enough context for the reader to grasp key concepts that are coming across in the essay.

Analysis is present but lacks a minor detail that would help to solidify it.

Analysis is acceptable, but comes across as vague or not thoroughly thought out.

Analysis needs major editing. Analysis only provides a brief view that is not fully developed for the essay.

Critical analysis is missing.

Element was not attempted or poorly executed. Similarity index is way too high.

90 / 100

Writing claims are supported by a mixed blend of sources. Sources are reputable and are structured properly within APA guidelines.

Writing claims are supported by a mixed blend of sources, but it could use one or two more sources to make it solid.

NEEDS REVISION (80)

NEEDS MAJOR EDITING (70)

MISSED THE MARK (60)

INCOMPLETE (0)

FORMAT (10%)

MEETS EXPECTATIONS (100)

NEEDS MINOR EDITING (90)

NEEDS REVISION (80)

NEEDS MAJOR EDITING (70)

MISSED THE MARK (60)

INCOMPLETE (0)

WORD CHOICE (10%)

MEETS EXPECTATIONS (100)

NEEDS MINOR EDITING (90)

NEEDS REVISION (80)

NEEDS MAJOR EDITING (70)

MISSED THE MARK (60)

INCOMPLETE (0)

Sources that were used are acceptable, but needs a bit of improvement.

Very little sources were used to support the claims. Sources may show improper structuring.

Sources are missing. Reputable sources were not used to support claims. Format and structure of sources do not follow APA guidelines.

Element was not attempted or poorly executed. Similarity index is way too high.

90 / 100

Well-structured and formatted properly according to APA guidelines. Paragraphs transition from one to another. Essay is within the guidelines for the word count.

Well-structured and formatted properly according to APA guidelines, but may have missed a couple of marks with structure.

Format is acceptable, but needs a bit of improvement.

Format is not tight or concise.

Format is off. Written as one huge paragraph. Lack of attention to details.

Element was not attempted or poorly executed. Similarity index is way too high.

80 / 100

Vibrant choice of words is present. Engages the reader to want to read more. Writing contains college-level vocabulary.

Word choice could use minor editing. Essay is still engaging, but needs to be slightly polished.

Word choice needs strengthening.

Word choice is weak and issues with sentence structure is present.

Does not demonstrate college-level vocabulary. Writing contains slang and is more appropriate in a conversation with a friend instead of as a scholarly piece of writing.

Element was not attempted or poorly executed. Similarity index is way too high.

MECHANICS (10%)

MEETS EXPECTATIONS (100)

NEEDS MINOR EDITING (90)

NEEDS REVISION (80)

NEEDS MAJOR EDITING (70)

MISSED THE MARK (60)

INCOMPLETE (0)

80 / 100

Proper punctuation, spelling, capitalization, and grammar are present. No errors.

One or two errors with punctuation, spelling, capitalization and grammar are present.

Three to four errors with punctuation, spelling, capitalization and grammar are present.

Five to six errors with punctuation, spelling, capitalization and grammar are present.

Essay needs to be re-written due to poor spelling, run-on sentences are present, punctuation missing, etc.

Element was not attempted or poorly executed. Similarity index is way too high.