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BarriertoEconomicStability.docx by Taiyuan Mei

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wealth

what kind of inequality? This is a very vague term.

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good-historical context for the current problem

how has government de- regulation contributed to the problem?

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make sure when you paraphrase you use entirely different language from the source material. If you can't, quote.

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Ayla Ogus Binatli. "Growth and Income Inequality: A Comparative Analysis", Economics Research International, 2012 Publicat ion

Shahbaz, Muhammad, Ijaz Ur Rehman, and Nurul Shahnaz Ahmad Mahdzan. "Linkages between income inequality, international remittances and economic growth in Pakistan", Quality & Quantity, 2014. Publicat ion

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Text Comment. wealth

Text Comment. what kind o f inequality? T his is a very vague term.

Vague Unclear: When making a po int in o ne o f yo ur bo dy paragraphs, o ne o f the mo st co mmo n mistakes is to no t o f f er eno ugh details. A paragraph witho ut much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when yo ur claims are as specif ic as po ssible, T he mo re detailed evidence yo u o f f er, the mo re ref erence po ints yo ur reader will have. Remember that yo u are co mmunicating yo ur argument to a reader who has o nly yo ur descriptio n to go by. So meo ne who reads yo ur essay will no t auto matically kno w what yo u mean to express, so yo u have to supply details, to sho w the reader what yo u mean, no t just tell him o r her.

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Text Comment. ho w has go vernment de- regulatio n co ntributed to the pro blem?

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explain this po int. Ho w has health and saf ety played a ro le? Yo u just dro p this in.

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Text Comment. make sure when yo u paraphrase yo u use entirely dif f erent language f ro m

the so urce material. If yo u can't, quo te.

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