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As you are revising your essays this week, you may choose to complete the following extra credit exercise:

1) Choose one paragraph from the body of your draft that you know needs significant revision. Copy the original paragraph and mark it "Original."

2) Next, make all revisions as you see fit and mark them with color, highlighting, or bold font. (your choice).  Mark this version "Revised."

3) At least one change should be for the purpose of "readability."

4) Following the corrected/marked paragraph, write a one-paragraph explanation of the changes made and how you feel the paragraph is improved as a result of the changes. 

5) Submit it here by the due date.