Argumentative Research Paper - Racism and Prejudice in the US Justice System
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Assignment 09.1- Draft #2- Draft Racism and Prejudice in
the US Justice System.docx by Ebonee Jarrell
Submission date: 04-Apr-2021 09:28PM (UTC-0600) Submission ID: 1550595500 File name: Assignment_09.1-_Draft_2-_Draft_Racism_and_Prejudice_in_the_US_Justice_System.docx (41.73K) Word count: 2033 Character count: 10751
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Hi Ebonee, You chose a timely and important topic for your argumentative research paper. While you made some effective editing and revision changes to the first draft, you still will need to make your side of the argument clear in your final draft because the majority of your paper is directly quoted material from your sources, and there is a clear lack of main points that you came up with in support of your side is the issue, which should be sparingly supported by concrete evidence from your research sources. Good work citing those sources though. You need more sophisticated main points of support for your side of the issue that are your own ideas rather than directly quoted material from your research sources. You need to address the opposing viewpoints and refute them. You'll also want to save your strongest point of support to follow your refutation of the opposing viewpoint as the reader will tend to remember your strongest point if it comes directly before the concluding paragraph. Please see the Argumentative Research Paper Sample Outline handout in the Course Information Discussion Forum under the Topic Handouts. See comments throughout. I look forward to reading your final draft. Sasha
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GENERAL COMMENTS
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Title-Content
The title of your essay needs to convey the topic and your opinion about it (or if it’s an argumentative paper, then the topic and the side of the issue you will be arguing in favor of). See pages 23 and 72-73 of the textbook for more information about formulating a title.
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Announcing Intent
Avoid announcing your intention with a phrase such as “This paper will. . ." or "In this paper I will. . . "
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Argumentative Thesis Statement
The introduction needs to include your argumentative research thesis statement, which should include the side of the issue you will be arguing in favor of as well as the main points that support it.
In-text Citation-period placement
In in-text citations the period follows the end parenthesis rather than following the last word in the sentence. This is true for summarized, paraphrased and directly quoted material.
In-Text Citation Parenth. Ref. Info.
Make sure you include the author's last name or the title of the article if no author is listed, the year of publication, and the page or paragraph number, if applicable, in each in-text citation. If you are paraphrasing or summarizing information then you don’t need to include the page or paragraph number; however, you do need to include page or paragraph numbers for directly quoted material.
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Make sure you include the author's last name or the title of the article if no author is listed, the year of publication, and the page or paragraph number, if applicable, in each in-text citation. If you are paraphrasing or summarizing information then you don’t need to include the page or paragraph number; however, you do need to include page or paragraph numbers for directly quoted material.
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Good Use of Info from Research Source
Good use of information from the research source to support your side of the issue.
Text Comment. Check the format of your block quotation.
Block Quotation
Place direct quotations longer than 40 words in block format:
“Place direct quotations that are 40 words, or longer, in a free-standing block of typewritten lines, and omit quotation marks. Start the quotation on a new line, indented 1/2 inch from the left margin, i.e., in the same place you would begin a new paragraph. Type the entire quotation on the new margin, and indent the first line of any subsequent paragraph within the quotation 1/2 inch from the new margin. Maintain double-spacing throughout. The parenthetical citation should come after the closing punctuation mark.
Jones's (1998) study found the following: Students often had difficulty using APA style, especially when it was their first time citing sources. This difficulty could be attributed to the fact that many students failed to purchase a style manual or to ask their teacher for help. (p. 199)”
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Intro. Direct Quote
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Intro. Direct Quote
Always introduce a direct quote.
Text Comment. Include a page or paragraph number with direct quotes.
Block Quotation
Place direct quotations longer than 40 words in block format:
“Place direct quotations that are 40 words, or longer, in a free-standing block of typewritten lines, and omit quotation marks. Start the quotation on a new line, indented 1/2 inch from the left margin, i.e., in the same place you would begin a new paragraph. Type the entire quotation on the new margin, and indent the first line of any subsequent paragraph within the quotation 1/2 inch from the new margin. Maintain double-spacing throughout. The parenthetical citation should come after the closing punctuation mark.
Jones's (1998) study found the following: Students often had difficulty using APA style, especially when it was their first time citing sources. This difficulty could be attributed to the fact that many students failed to purchase a style manual or to ask their teacher for help. (p. 199)”
Retrieved from https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/02/
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Text Comment. Don't indent the sentence following the block quotation because it goes with the above paragraph.
Good Use of Info from Research Source
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Good use of information from the research source to support your side of the issue.
Text Comment. Include a page or paragraph number with direct quotes.
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Text Comment. Don't indent the sentence following the block quotation because it goes with the above paragraph.
Announcing Intent
Avoid announcing your intention with a phrase such as “This paper will. . ." or "In this paper I will. . . "
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Intro. Direct Quote
Always introduce a direct quote.
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Block Quotation
Place direct quotations longer than 40 words in block format:
“Place direct quotations that are 40 words, or longer, in a free-standing block of typewritten lines, and omit quotation marks. Start the quotation on a new line, indented 1/2 inch from the left margin, i.e., in the same place you would begin a new paragraph. Type the entire quotation on the new margin, and indent the first line of any subsequent paragraph within the quotation 1/2 inch from the new margin. Maintain double-spacing throughout. The parenthetical citation should come after the closing punctuation mark.
Jones's (1998) study found the following: Students often had difficulty using APA style, especially when it was their first time citing sources. This difficulty could be attributed to the fact that many students failed to purchase a style manual or to ask their teacher for help. (p. 199)”
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Retrieved from https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/02/
Block Quotation
Place direct quotations longer than 40 words in block format:
“Place direct quotations that are 40 words, or longer, in a free-standing block of typewritten lines, and omit quotation marks. Start the quotation on a new line, indented 1/2 inch from the left margin, i.e., in the same place you would begin a new paragraph. Type the entire quotation on the new margin, and indent the first line of any subsequent paragraph within the quotation 1/2 inch from the new margin. Maintain double-spacing throughout. The parenthetical citation should come after the closing punctuation mark.
Jones's (1998) study found the following: Students often had difficulty using APA style, especially when it was their first time citing sources. This difficulty could be attributed to the fact that many students failed to purchase a style manual or to ask their teacher for help. (p. 199)”
Retrieved from https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/02/
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In-Text Citation Parenth. Ref. Info.
Make sure you include the author's last name or the title of the article if no author is listed, the year of publication, and the page or paragraph number, if applicable, in each in-text citation. If you are paraphrasing or summarizing information then you don’t need to include the page or paragraph number; however, you do need to include page or paragraph numbers for directly quoted material.
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Text Comment. Hi Ebonee, You chose a timely and important topic for your argumentative research paper. While you made some effective editing and revision changes to the first draft, you still will need to make your side of the argument clear in your final draft because the majority of your paper is directly quoted material from your sources, and there is a clear lack of main points that you came up with in support of your side is the issue, which should be sparingly supported by concrete evidence from your research sources. Good work citing those sources though. You need more sophisticated main points of support for your side of the issue that are your own ideas rather than directly quoted material from your research sources. You need to address the opposing viewpoints and refute them. You'll also want to save your strongest point of support to follow your refutation of the opposing viewpoint as the reader will tend to remember your strongest point if it comes directly before the concluding paragraph. Please see the Argumentative Research Paper Sample Outline handout in the Course Information Discussion Forum under the Topic Handouts. See comments throughout. I look forward to reading your final draft. Sasha
