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Dangers Associated with Social Networking

Social networking refers to the online platform where individuals connect with their families, friends, clients, and colleagues. The online platform allows people with the same mindset to communicate using websites and web-based application systems. Some of the social networking sites include Facebook, Myspace, Twitter, and LinkedIn. Depending on the social networking platform chosen, members may connect by contacting one another. Through the online platform, people can get more worth in social media. More people are getting familiar with online websites

Several limits are brought about by social marketing in the contemporary world. Online platform sites for children have become insecure since the website has gotten rid of the obstacle between the children's public and private self-making, being more vulnerable and subjection to dangerous consequences by sharing information via the website irresistibly. Moreover, children may obtain inappropriate content from social networking sites, which they're not psychologically compared to deal with at their younger age. Likewise, teenagers may suffer from internet addiction as most teens spend more time online. Other children may be victims of cyberbullying, which may lead to suicidal behaviors. Statistics indicate that more than 37% of teenagers between the age of 12 and 17 have been bullied using online platforms such as Facebook and Instagram (Oberst, p54). Comment by Tika Adhikari: This sentence is confusing to me. I thinks it’s the wording.

Additionally, online websites create more loopholes for malicious people to acquire the personal information of many people. The rate of the increasing fraud by hackers has increased at a higher rate by providing scam messages or emails, which, when open, makes the hackers access data in the computers. Any hacker who gets access to a loophole in the computer may easily get the user's contacts. If, for instance, the user access social media platforms comment on the hotel and restaurants, the hacker may access the computer used to acquire browsing and shopping history. A social media hack permits malicious people to post any kind of information which appears to come from the owner. The information post may be embarrassing in nature, offensive, and sensitive, which may cause disentanglement among families or colleagues.

Social media networks may be time-wasting, especially when no work-related activities are carried out. Forbes report indicates that more than 89% of the online platforms admitted to wasting most of their time on social media while they are at work. Wastage of time in the website leads to the loss of productivity to many entities and organizations. Besides, civil behavior is decreased rapidly by the use of online platforms. There appears to be a trend in the more uncivil behavior online, bleeding into the public square. The website's negative aspects are identified as "dividing the social fabric of how the community operates." More emotional and unregulated behavior is dictated when every person can respond to the other person anyhow without any social restriction regulations applied. Comment by Tika Adhikari: I'm unsure how these points are connected. Maybe this should be another paragraph?

Moreover, internet addiction may have severe consequences, especially for students who spend a lot of time on the social media platform. Precious time may be lost when students spend much time chatting with friends or employees playing games, leading to losses to the company. Teenagers may also develop negative vices such as the use of illicit drugs. Comment by Tika Adhikari: Some kind of connection between ideas here maybe would help it flow better Comment by Tika Adhikari: this idea doesnt seem to be clearly connected to me

Also, social media sites lack sincerity in how people express their feelings. Conversations conveyed online are filled with ‘haha’ exclamations which indicate happiness among the people. The normal laughter is replaced with acronyms in the online dialogues. Likewise, the quality of conversation in terms of understanding, as well as thoughtfulness, is decreased. Most people are spending much time online. They do not understand other people's feelings, character, and emotions during a conversation(Rottenberg,p531). Comment by Tika Adhikari: Maybe more clever or creative openers would be good Comment by Tika Adhikari: Maybe these two sentences could be combined

Fear of missing out is also instilled in many via social media sites. The online platforms tend to portray others' lives as better than others in terms of better living and having fun. The notion that one might be missing out may deteriorate the person's self-esteem, lowliness, low self-compassion, and trigger anxiety(Clark et al.,p32). The fear of missing out makes people view their phones to check on the updates of a particular person or family portrayed on social media. The fear of losing out makes people assume that they got low social rank as compared to others. The belief may result in the creation of an inferiority feeling to an individual. FOMO feeling is evident in the age between 18 and 33. Two-thirds of the age bracket confesses to suffering from the fear of missing out. Comment by Tika Adhikari: This sentence could be tightened Comment by Tika Adhikari: monotonous opening to sentence Comment by Tika Adhikari: monotonous Comment by Tika Adhikari: what is this acronym?

Moreover, there are increased cases of depression and loneliness caused by online platforms. An increased rate of depression and loneliness is brought about when users miss access to social media sites. The mental effect may also occur, especially when young teenagers feel the pressure to compare and contrast their lives with those seen on social media. Social media life appears to be more pleasing than the lives they are living. Comment by Tika Adhikari: maybe combine these sentences

When using social media platforms, individuals should take full responsibility and caution before joining any online platform presented to them. Besides, members should be careful in what they post not to harm others and maintain respect for other people. Laziness is also enhanced when instead of checking out on friends, a message is used. Social life is made more convenient to many, thereby attracting more laziness. Spending much time on the online platform makes people lazy, stressed, and lack face-to-face contact with other members.

In conclusion, social networking has some limits that the uses ought to be careful before visiting social media platforms. Some of the disadvantages portrayed by the online platform include internet addiction, exposure of private information to the public, the creation of fear of missing out, and the occurrence of depression and loneliness.

Work Cited

Clark, Jenna L., et al. "Social Network Sites, and Well-Being: The Role of Social Connections." Current Directions in Psychological Science, vol. 27, no. 1, Feb. 2018, pp. 32–37, doi:10.1177/0963721417730833.

Oberst, U., Wegmann, E., Stodt, B., Brand, M., & Chamarro, A. (2017). Negative consequences from heavy social networking in adolescents: The mediating role of fear of missing out. Journal of adolescence, 55, 51-60.

Rottenberg, Annette T., and Donna Haisty Winchell. Elements of argument: A text and reader. Macmillan, 2011.

Review

1. Discuss whether or not the opening gets and keeps your attention and makes you want to read on or discourages you from doing so. Point out how the author clarifies the subject immediately, or what the author could do to improve the opening.

I think that the subject of the essay is pretty clear right from the start, or at least that it will be about social media and then in the second paragraph that it will be about the dangers of it for children. The openin of this essay did not really grab my attention though or make me want to continie reading. Some attnetion grabber or illustration could help with that.

2. After you have read halfway through, note your response. Comment on what has created that feeling. What has the author done to make you want to read on or to make you feel like stopping? Are there any questions that need to be answered as you reach this part of the paper? How has the author given you a good idea of where the paper is headed during the last half?

I feel like there are a lot of ideas happening here. Thee is a lot of jumping from one "danger of the internet" to another. Maybe focusing on one of these and it's impacts would be better. Or if there were more connecting sentences or paragraphs between ideas. The jumping is making me want to stop more than to continue because I feel like I'm not getting the full take on any one issue. The second intoductory paragraph alluded to the essay being about the dangers of the internet for children and adolescents but to me it seems we have not focused on that. 

3. Point out any special way that makes the ending go nicely with the rest of the paper. Make suggestions for ways to improve clarity and cleverness here. What has made the ending especially strong, or what is missing that should be here?

I think the ending of this paper could be more clear and concise. Again, i think you should narrow down what danger you want to talk about and focus on it but regaurdless of if you do this or not I think the ending and conclusion of this essay could use some work. it would be stronger if it was more than just reiterating the points.

4. Identify the focus or note what makes it difficult to do so. Would it be better to state the focus in one sentence or to handle it in a subtle way? Comment about how well the focus fits the rest of the paper or make suggestions for limiting or broadening it.

I think the focus of this paper should be limited to less topics. 

5. Identify the dominant mode or cite reasons for not being able to do so. Tell the writer about strengths in the use of this organizational pattern or about ways to improve. Would another mode be better? Why? Discuss whether or not the order of the parts of the paper is proper. Note any special problems in paragraphing.

Each paragrah began with a new problemw ith the internet, describing it, and then what it causes. I think a different structure would be easier to read and comprehend if you narrowed your subject down adn could break the paragraphs of your essay into the parts of it.

6. Critique the use of detail by giving examples of its being clever, authoritative, relevant, or thorough. If there are problems, suggest improvements. Tell about your "sense of being there" that you might have felt. Make suggestions about how that feeling could be made stronger. Remind the writer of any detail that does not fit the focus or of any that should be added.

"if, for example. the user access social media platforms comment on the hotel and restaurants, the hacker may acces the computer used to acquire browsing and shopping history". This example doesn't seem to do a good job of explaining the true danger of hacker. I feel it could be worded better to get your point across. More examples like this one explaining and describing things could be helpful.

7. If you like the choices, point out good examples of metaphors, clever and creative word usage, effective use of repetition, or good sense impressions. If you feel the paper is lacking in this area, present ways to add "special techniques."

The use of illustration goes a long way in making a paper more readable as do metaphors. Some of these could really help. Describe the different dangers maybe with a personal story (or one you made up) an example of a clever metaphor to explain it.

8. Cite examples of smooth and clear writing. Is the expression honest or does it seem strained and unnatural? Look for choppiness in the length of sentences or a monotonous similarity of openers. Suggest changes that might make a passage smoother. Tell the author about any sentences that need to be tightened or combined.

I made notes within the essay so it will be easier. 

9. Cite examples of the author succeeding or failing to speak effectively to the audience. Offer help if you see problems here.

There is a use of acronym that I dont understand and others may not as well.

10. What does the writer do to handle this assignment well, or what can be done to improve the paper so that it fits the requirements? If you can predict areas where the teacher, though kind and understanding, is likely to be critical, point those out.

Some different kinds of citations could be added. I think that the ideas you wrote about while all good, could be narrowed down to one danger of the internet so uou can really get into it.

11. Rate this paper's overall readabilty

3 of 5 

12. Rate the strength of this paper's thesis.

2 of 5 

13. How clearly does the author express his or her ideas?

3 of 5 

14. How effective was the writer's use of language?

2 of 5