Does Technology promote loneliness

Argumentative Essay by mutiu Olokodana

Submission date: 28-Jan-2020 02:37AM (UTC-0500) Submission ID: 1247589300 File name: temp_turnitintool_600359574.DoesTechnologyPromoteLoneliness.docx (18.59K) Word count: 841 Character count: 4498

10. Recycled

42% SIMILARITY INDEX

9% INTERNET SOURCES

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42% STUDENT PAPERS

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Argumentative Essay ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to Straighterline Student Paper

Submitted to University of North Carolina - Wilmington Student Paper

Submitted to Cave Creek Unified District Student Paper

Submitted to Saint Paul College Student Paper

Submitted to Squalicum High School Student Paper

Submitted to Grant MacEwan Community College Student Paper

Submitted to American Public University System Student Paper

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FINAL GRADE

0/100 Argumentative Essay GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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10. Recycled

Unfortunately, your essay is reworded from a paper that was already submitted to Straighterline or another university. This is a type of plagiarism called recycling, which is unacceptable by Straighterline policy. Therefore, you will need to completely rewrite a new essay with a new topic in order for a submission under this assignment to be accepted and graded.

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RUBRIC: ENG101 V6:ARGUMENTATIVE FINAL

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Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions

Thesis or potential thesis is neither present in any portion of the essay, nor is it implied in any manner. Thesis may be present but incorrect for the assignment’s objectives/approach. Thesis may be present but the submission overall fails to meet most assignment objectives (such as the essay is only a paragraph) that determining the thesis’ viability is problematic.

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.

Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.

Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples.

Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.

0 / 5

Thesis support, thesis development, use of examples, logic, and reason

Support is more than lacking, such that it is insufficient for review (assignment does not meet length requirements). Body paragraphs may be very limited in original material for evaluation due to too much borrowed information and a problematic similarity report which qualifies the paper for an account hold and “similarity match: low” QuickMark.

No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic development. Little-to-no argument is present. Topic development is flawed or non- existent.

Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. At least two arguments are present, but counterargument and refutation may be weak or missing. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning. The body paragraphs have an insufficient mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. More development needed for supporting reasons or evidence. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis. The body paragraphs have an adequate mix of cited quotes,

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paraphrases, and summaries.

Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. At least three strong arguments, a counterargument, and a refutation are present. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs. The body paragraphs have a sufficient mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. At least three strong arguments, a counterargument, and a refutation are present. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis. The body paragraphs have an exceptional mix of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

0 / 5

Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences

Two or more major organizational elements are missing, such as an introduction and conclusion. Essay be one long paragraph with no discernible separation of ideas.

No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.

Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.

Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.

Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization.

Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.

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Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary

May contain more than 8 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain more than 8 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Fails to demonstrate clarity in most sentences throughout the paper. The lack of lucidity makes it difficult for the reader to determine the paper’s focus.

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May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.

May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.

May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. <br />May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.

May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. <br />Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.

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Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement

Contains more than 7 different grammar errors. <br />The identical 5+ errors may be repeated throughout. <br /><br />

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. <br />The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

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Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors

Contains more than 7 different punctuation/capitalization errors. <br />The identical 5+ errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. <br />The identical 3 – 4

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errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

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heading, title, margins, spacing, length*, underlined thesis *Length for argumentative is 750 words minimum

Format or word minimum is completely lacking. Formatting may be missing five or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, and/or thesis not underlined). Essay is severely underdeveloped, such that it includes only a paragraph or two.

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay. Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.

Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.

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Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper requires at least three sources.

Sources are neither present on the Works Cited page nor employed in the paper. No attempt or implied intention to use sources. At least seven different errors in documenting sources. Similarity report may present potential plagiarism concerns, so much so that

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grading the paper is acceptable but the paper must be placed on an account hold due to qualifying for the “similarity match: low” QuickMark.

Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list.

Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.

Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed.

Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.

Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.