Order 1381350: Executive Summary

Argument Analysis Revision Memo

Instructor Comments/Questions

My word count fell short of the required minimum 1,200 – 1,500.

My overall similarity score on the final draft was 33%, which indicates too much quotation.

For the rewrite in final portfolio, try to develop some of these ideas more. What else seems problematic about the author's argument? (you can bring in more quotations or specifics as well)

My revision plan is to paraphrase and possibly limit the amount of quotations used in future drafts. I can be a bit more precise when utilizing quotations so that my essay is effective and flows. In this instance, I may have felt the author expressed the segment of the story much better than I could have, but I do believe I can paraphrase so that my similarity score is diminished. I also plan to develop ideas and word count, where possible, and diving into issues associated with the author’s argument.

The areas I believe I need assistance with are: 1) How do I effectively project an argument without personally involving myself in the story?; 2) How and when should I use quotations to effectively project what the author’s point of view or my point of view is?; and 3) How do I provide detail within the essay without making it sound repetitive?