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Annotated Bibliography by Olayemi Olatunji

Submission date: 08-Jul-2021 11:40PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1617384941 File name: www_moodle_temp_turnitintool_1851579.Annotated_Bibliography.docx (16.84K) Word count: 940 Character count: 5198

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Annotated Bibliography ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

www.coursehero.com Internet Source

FINAL GRADE

10/20 Annotated Bibliography GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Hi Olayemi! 

You have summarized the source quite effectively. Good job! 

However, the assessment and reflection paragraphs are missing in the paper. Make sure to develop them in separate paragraphs after the summarization. 

Also, make sure to cite the sources as per MLA- style formatting. 

Please check my specific comments in the paper. All the best! 

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Comment 1

Hi Olayemi! I am glad to check your paper today! 

PM

Comment 2 | Format

Your last name and the page number should be mentioned in the upper right corner of each page. 

Comment 3 | Format

You are expected to write your last name as well. 

Comment 4

What are the ways that you will discuss in the research paper? Make sure to mention the supporting points in the thesis statement. 

QM

Comment 5 | Sources

Make sure to cite the sources using MLA-style formatting. Please refer to this link for the formatting guidelines. 

Comment 6 | Summarization

Make sure to develop the summarization of the article in the first paragraph under the sources. 

Frag. | Style/Lang. Fragment: A sentence fragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such fragments become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. The most common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a noun) for a main verb, as in the following sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare from dusk to dawn."

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Comment 7 | Summarization

Good summarization. 

Comment 8 | Assessment

Assessment paragraph missing: After summarizing a source, you are expected to evaluate it. Is it a useful source? Is the information reliable? Is this source biased or objective? What is the goal of this source?

Comment 9 | Reflection

Reflection paragraph missing: Once you've summarized and assessed a source, you need to ask how it fits into your research. Was this source helpful to you? How does it help you shape your argument? How can you use this source in your research project?

Comment 10 | Summarization

Good summarization. 

Comment 11 | Assessment

Make sure to develop separate Assessment and Reflection paragraphs under each source. You are expected to develop three paragraphs in total for each source. 

Comment 12 | Format

Although the assignment guidelines state that you need to review four potential sources for your research paper project, you are expected to select two to explore further. Please refer to the guidelines. 

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Awk. | Style/Lang. Awkward: The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting.

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Comment 13 | Format

The annotated bibliography doesn't necessarily require a separate Works Cited page because you have already cited the sources. Consider removing it. 

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SUMMARIZATION (20%)

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ASSESSMENT (20%)

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REFLECTION (20%)

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2.60 / 5

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Resource Topics Main Subtopics/arguments/ main points

Poor to no summarization of the sources, with no or brief mention of either resource’s arguments, points, and/or topic.

Insufficient summarization of one or both sources, covering superficial arguments, points, and/or topics. Only one source may be adequately summarized.

Adequate summarization of one or both sources, covering a good portion of one or more resources’ main arguments, points, and/or topics.

Sufficient summarization of the sources, covering most of both resources’ main arguments, points, and/or topics.

Exceptional summarization of the sources, covering both resources’ main arguments, points, and/or topics.

0 / 5

Assessment or Analysis Intended audience/purpose Resource Reliability

Poor to no assessment of the sources, with no or brief mention of either resource’s goals, stances, and/or reliability. One or no sources may be poorly assessed for usefulness in relation to the research paper topic.

Insufficient assessment of the sources, covering one or both resources’ goals, stances, and/or reliability. Only one source may be adequately assessed for usefulness in relation to the research paper topic.

Adequate assessment of one or both sources, covering one or both resources’ goals, stances, and/or reliability. One or both of the sources have adequate discussion in terms of the sources’ usefulness in relation to the research paper topic.

Sufficient assessment of the sources, covering most of both resources’ goals, stances, and/or reliability. Mostly outstanding evaluation of the sources’ usefulness in relation to the research paper topic.

Exceptional assessment or analysis of the sources, covering both resources’ goals, stances, and/or reliability. Overall outstanding evaluation of the sources’ usefulness in relation to the research paper topic.

0 / 5

Resource viability, helpfulness, persuasion

Paper does not include reflection components, such as how and why the source will play a role in supporting or refuting the stance(s) in the author’s research paper, for any of the sources listed.

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SOURCES (10%)

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STYLE/LANG. (10%)

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Poor to no reflection of the sources’ viability in the research essay to help shape arguments and/or support. Author may not provide any discussions related to how one or both sources supported or changed his/her initial opinion of the topic.

Adequate reflection on one or both sources’ viability in the research essay to help shape arguments and/or support. Fairly clear expression of how one or both sources supported or changed the student’s initial opinion of the topic.

Sufficient reflection on both sources’ viability in the research essay to help shape arguments and/or support. Mostly clear expression of how the sources supported or changed the student’s initial opinion of the topic.

Exceptional reflection on both sources’ viability in the research essay to help shape arguments and/or support. Clear expression of how the sources supported or changed the student’s initial opinion of the topic.

3 / 5

Citing of Two Sources in MLA Format Works Cited page OR citing within the Annotated Bibliography itself.

Less than two sources are documented either within the piece or on a Works Cited page. A lack of clear formatting throughout the bibliography substantially weakens the writer’s exploration.

Bibliography lacks one of two sources and/or both sources are not accurately documented*. The errors in formatting distract from the reader’s ability to follow the author’s bibliography. *within the piece or on an ancillary Works Cited page following the bibliography.

At least two sources are documented*, but one or both may not be in the desired format, and this formatting inconsistency deters from the readability of the bibliography. *within the piece or on an ancillary Works Cited page following the bibliography.

At least two sources are documented*, according to MLA guidelines, but some flaws in formatting exist; however, the flaws do not deter from the writer’s exploration of sources. *within the piece or on an ancillary Works Cited page following the bibliography.

Two or more sources are accurately documented, according to MLA guidelines Sources are cited within the piece or on an ancillary Works Cited page following the bibliography.

4 / 5

Sentence Structure (Grammar) Word Choice/Vocabulary (redundancy, repetition, awkwardness)

The writer has given very little or no apparent consideration to language and style. Word choice is sloppy and/or incorrect.

The writer’s use of language and style diminishes the nature and strength of the assignment. Writer’s language/style choices make the bibliography less cohesive

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PUNCT./CAP. (10%)

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FORMAT (10%)

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and/or difficult to understand.

The writer’s use of language and style, at times, deters form the overall assignment. The writer’s word choice and style sometimes detracts from the overall review of sources.

The writer’s use of language and style helps convey the author’s point(s). The writer almost always uses language and style as a tool to enhance the review of sources.

The writer’s use of language and style accentuates the nature of the bibliography. Writer wields language and style as a tool to enhance the review of sources.

5 / 5

Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors, typos/misspellings

Contains more than 6 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical or similar errors may be repeated throughout. The errors help to significantly deter from the writer’s overall argument.

Contains many (more than 4) different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical or similar errors are repeated throughout. The errors deter from the writer’s overall argument.

Contains more than 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical or similar errors may be repeated throughout. At times, the errors deter from the writer’s overall argument.

Contains 1-2 types of punctuation/capitalization errors, which may be repeated throughout the essay. The errors do not deter from the writer’s overall argument, but they serve as a distraction.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization errors, or no more than 2 different errors with no repetition, and/or the errors do not deter from the writer’s argument.

4 / 5

Attention to Directions/ Format of Bibliography using MLA Heading 1” Margins Double-Spaced Word count: Minimum 500 words

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements, and as a result, the bibliography is difficult to read or is unreadable.

Meets some formatting requirements, but those missing may deter from the readability of the bibliography.

Meets some formatting requirements: the lack of appropriate formatting leads to some lack of readability or to a distraction while reading.

Meets most formatting requirements; the formatting allows for an ease of understanding.

5 (5)

Meets the suggested formatting requirements; formatting enhances the readability of the bibliography.