English Composition II (ENG 215)

Running Head: WILD LIFE 1

Ashenafi Mengestu

English Composition II

Touchstone 1.2

June 26, 2020

Research Question: How should ethical concerns with wildlife hunting and it is affects? Comment by Crystal: This question requires rewording

Thesis

The ethics in wildlife hunting are demanding much more attention and a particular way in which all the standards should meet. Comment by Crystal: This is unclear. Do you mean, “……require a particular way in which…..?”

Outline:

Abstract:

Wildlife Hunting guidelines are built up so these practices have next to zero effect on those natural life populaces that don't cause harm. Comment by Crystal: Imprecise language.

Introduction

At the point when a wildlife populace is compromised, purposely slaughtering people from it might appear to be unreasonable.

Literature review:

Wildlife chasing has pulled in wide scholarly and famous consideration as of late. An influx of insightful analysis and prevailing press inclusion encompassed the now notorious slaughtering of Cecil lion outside national park which is in Zimbabwe. Comment by Crystal: Citations are needed for both sentences.

Results and Discussion

This examination found that the usage of the natural life chasing forbiddance was completed without satisfactory counsel with nearby networks. Or maybe it was passed on to nearby networks as an administration strategy order. Comment by Crystal: This is grammatically incorrect and the meaning unclear.

Conclusion

I have attempted to show that the prior defenses for chasing are fantasies, and in this manner in themselves don't show that chasing is safe from moral judgment. Comment by Crystal: This is confusing and unclear.

Reflection Questions:

Learning to conduct research is important because it is a skill you will use both in academia and in your professional life. It improves critical thinking and empowers you to find information for yourself. Consider the process of researching as a whole. What was the most challenging aspect of the process for you?

I agreed that research is the best way to improves critical thinking and it is a best skill that we can use in academic as well as in professional life but I think the most challenging aspect of the process for me is to find the exact and accurate sources regarding to our topic because our topic and thesis based on these sources. Comment by Crystal: Omit.

The working thesis statement is a proposed answer to your research question. It should clearly identify a debatable topic and take a position on one side of that topic. Analyze the effectiveness of your working thesis statement.

My working thesis statement is based on Effects of Hunting. It also explains the positive and negative site of hunting. Some people take it as a fun r hobby but the killing of animals with no specific reason can affect our globe and ecosystem. Because sometime hunting can also disturb the food chain and the species become extinct in our ecosystem. Comment by Crystal: Do you mean “or?”

A detailed outline is an effective tool for laying out the progression of an argument. It allows you to consider the arrangement and organization of your ideas, as well as choose places to incorporate outside source materials. Review your detailed outline and summarize the argument you have presented.

In this outline the basic points that I discussed are about wildlife chasing and I argue with their protection, security and the importance of wildlife in nature. Chasing and catching may decrease natural life harm by 1) diminishing untamed life populaces beneath the ecological conveying limit, 2) expelling creatures from the populace before they would somehow or another kick the bucket, or 3) changing conduct of untamed life. Comment by Crystal: None of this was provided in the outline.

You will use the same topic on three of the remaining Touchstones in this course. What kind of feedback would be helpful for you? What are specific questions you might have as you go deeper into the research process?

The feedback is most important part of our work and the best kind of feedback is I think in the form of discussion or comments because in every moment you should learn from your mistakes. When you go deeper into the research process, the specific questions are related to its sources and their effects. And if the topic is related about some issues or problem then the solutions are also important, and the solution may be is in the form of opinion or question.

References

Ariyne,A.H.. (2020). Wildlife Hunting.

https://www.researchgate.net/publication/257363321_Wildlife_hunting_and_use

Batavia,C.. (2018). Hunting

file:///C:/Users/abdul/Downloads/Documents/Batavia2018_CL.pdf

Marvin,G.. (2020). Process of hunting.

https://www.academia.edu/2638828/Challenging_Animals_Project_and_Process_in_Hunting

ADDITIONAL FEEDBACK – USING THE RUBRIC:

RESEARCH QUESTION…Your Research Question was not well stated. However, I do believe the issue of wildlife hunting is relevant. Perhaps you can restate your question so that it can be understood. You earned 5 of 10 points.

WORKING THESIS…Your working thesis, like your research question, is unclear. It appears to provide more information rather than state a specific position on one side of this argument. You earned 5 of 10 points.

DETAILED OUTLINE…Your outline provides information but I cannot discern whether in answers your research or supports your thesis. Your research question does not appear to be debatable and the information provided in your outline does not answer everything raised in your research question or thesis statement. You also have statements that must be supported by additional evidence, data, a comparison analysis and examples. You earned 10 of 15 points.

STYLE..Your word choices were poor on occasion and there was too much imprecise language. You earned 2 of 5 points.

CONVENTIONS..There were a too many grammatical errors. You earned 3 of 5 points.

REFLECTION…Your reflection was thoughtful but the information in your Reflections should have been provided in your Outline... You earned 4 of 5 points.

FEEDBACK…I feel this topic is an important one. However, this is a topic that requires information. You do not provide enough information in this Outline. I had to grade your outline according to the rubric. Please remember to provide specific data and examples that are not included in the outline. Also, please see the track comments which are intended to help you become a better writer. Your grammar and sentence structure must be improved. I wish you all the best!

OVERALL SCORE…………………………………………………………………….29/50