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Dear Student, Thank you for submitting work for Lesson 5 in Practical English. We were unable to grade your work for the reason(s) marked below. Please note that your work being returned gives you the opportunity to ensure all instructions were followed, as well as earn the best grade possible for your work. A returned exam does not count against your grade. Once you have made the needed revisions, please submit your work again for review.

☐ Your composition for Question 1 must be three to five paragraphs long. It should include an introduction, a body, and a conclusion. Your composition should not be one long paragraph.

☐ The exam you submitted was incomplete. Your composition and cover letter must be submitted at the same time, preferably in the same document, for it to be graded.

☐ Composition was missing.

☐ Cover Letter was missing.

☐ For Question 1, you must select one of the topics listed in the exam instructions, and fully develop that topic.

☐ For the topic “Describe a single memorable day in your life” you must focus your writing on

describing one day and why it was memorable. You should not write about a longer time frame. For example, instead of writing about why owning a pet is memorable, focus only on the day you brought your new pet home.

☐ For the topic “Explain why a certain sport is your favorite” you must focus only on what makes

the sport your favorite. You should not include general information, rules, or history of the sport without including why the items make the sport your favorite.

☐ For the topic “Explain why a certain sport is your favorite” you must select an activity that

involves physical exertion and skill. Activities such as reading, crafting, or gardening, etc. can’t be used for this topic.

☐ Your response to Question 2 is not a cover letter. We cannot grade another type of letter for this assignment. Please review your study material for more information on Cover Letters and Resumes.

X The work, or file, you submitted was unacceptable for another reason: Your “favorite sport” must fit the definition of a sport. In addition, your composition must not include any information from any outside source. (Please see comments below for an explanation.)

Reminders:

 The instructions for this exam are found in Section 5.3-Writing Lesson Examination. There is also

a brief video about the exam included in this section.

 No research or information found on web sites should be used for this exam; all of the work must

be your own.

 If you have any questions about the assignment, please reach out to the school by phone, email,

or chat for assistance. We are available Monday through Friday, 9:00 a.m. to 6:00 p.m., Eastern

Time.

Best of luck on the assignment!

Name: Puja Gajmer

Student ID:23440376

Exam Number:700641

Date: 08/28/2021

Please note that I am returning your exam ungraded, because your composition doesn’t fit

the topic. A sport is an activity that involves both physical exertion and an element of

competition. Although your description of mountain biking includes a physical aspect, it

doesn’t include a competitive component.

To make your composition and, thereby, your exam eligible for grading, first thing you

need to revise it so that it pertains to mountain biking in terms of a physical and

competitive activity.

The second thing you need to do to make your exam eligible for grading is to delete any

information that you included in your composition that came from any outside source, one

of which you cite in the third paragraph (Impellizzeri, & Marcora, 2007). This subject requires

no research; it requires only your own explanation—your own opinion—about why

mountain biking is your favorite sport, so there should be no need to consult or cite any

information from any outside source.

After you revise your composition so that it describes mountain biking as a competitive,

physical sport and explains in your own words, without any help from any outside source,

why it is your favorite sport, please submit it and your cover letter together for grading.

Thank you.

______________________________________________________________________________

Explain why a certain sport is your favorite

My vision is blurred by sweat trickling into my eyes. My legs are weak, making pedaling

tough. Before speeding down the hill, I take a moment to halt and take a big breath. The rush of

blood coursing through my veins, coupled with the exciting prospect of what lies ahead, forces

my body to prepare and keep going. I accelerate down the slope, just avoiding a couple of large

jagged stones protruding from the trail and trees. Mountain biking is unquestionably my favorite

sport because of its intensity and extreme nature. Mountain biking is also my favorite game since

it is good for the ultimate growth of body, mind, soul, provides a challenge, and gives people a

chance to make a beneficial environmental footprint.

Mountain biking is a terrific method to get both your body and mind in shape. It's a sport

that helps you gain muscle while also improving your muscle fitness. It works practically all of

the body's muscles. Moreover, it is a fantastic way to increase your energy, stay in shape, and,

along with several other research, biking for a minimum of four hours every week can lower the

risk of heart disease by nearly 70%. The ability to exercise outdoors is, perhaps, the most

significant advantage of mountain riding. It enables the mind to grow and open up its concepts.

As for myself, I feel more in tune with things and have a sense of calm. There are no anxieties,

uncertainties, or fears on my mind either.

Mountain biking instills a strong sense of confidence and control, in addition to the

obvious physical and mental benefits. To avoid injury, I either plan ahead of time or think on my

feet when I face the many challenges and barriers on the trails. I have complete control over my

technique, performance, and results while biking. Taking on complex challenges and

successfully overcoming them gives people a sense of confidence and power. You will agree

with me that most students who participate in biking are always at the top of their class. Not that

I am busting, but it is a fact and something evident not only from my point of view but also from

other researchers like (Impellizzeri, & Marcora, 2007), who strongly support biking as one of the

best games in the world.

In conclusion, I want to urge people to join me in biking because of its numerous health

benefits, especially in this pandemic time; people can use this game to make their bodies strong

to concur not only covid but also lifestyle diseases like obesity and heart diseases. Secondly,

biking is also environment-friendly activity because there is no emitting of greenhouse gas which

affects climate. Just join me.

John Doe

543 main street,

CA 154673,

August 28, 2021.

To,

Mrs. Harrison lee,

The director of I&M company

Business center, NY/ 543768

Email; i&[email protected]

Subject: Application for marketing manager

Dear Mrs. Harrison.

I am interested in marketing manager in your company advertised on the internet and the daily

newspaper published on 25th 8-2021. The outlined qualifications match closely with my

professional skills, personal attributes, and experience.

Having worked as a general marketing director of Zitech company I am sure I have a lot to offer

in your company, for instance, having a bachelor’s degree in the respective field and five years

of experience in this field, I already know how to get to the heart of customers. Also, I have worn

many team management trophies from my previous job, which I think will be an added

advantage to your company. The timely and detailed report, good communication are other

attributes you will find in me. Additionally, I am a fast learner, dependable, organized, and easy

to make changes where need be.

I am looking forward to meeting with you and learning more about I&M's plans, goals, and

various ways to contribute to its future success. I am sure that I am the ideal candidate you are

looking for if you give me this opportunity. Attached is my resume. If you need any celerity,

contact me on (455)477 411 for any other information. Thank you for taking your time and

consideration.

Yours sincerely,

John Doe