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Introduction:
A global study by Aubrey published in The Lancet indicates that a poor diet is killing more people than smoking in the world. Aubrey had paradoxical findings that 800 million people in the world face acute starvation, are malnourished, while 1.9 billion people have excess weights, and are at risk of health complications (2019). This figure includes 41 million overweight children. The survey assessed people's diets in 95 nations using household data (Aubrey, 2019). The data was analyzed to assess the impacts of a poor diet on health. The results were analyzed against global deaths associated with tobacco. Nations that had the least cases of diet-related deaths were France, Israel, and Japan (Aubrey, 2019).
The World Health Organization holds that a healthy diet and lifestyle significantly reduce the risks of non-communicable diseases (NCDs) such as cancer and cardiovascular complications (2020). The opposite of the same is true, which increases the global risks to health and wellness. A healthy lifestyle and diet should start early in life through breastfeeding and indulging children in physical activities to promote social, cognitive, and physical fitness in the long term (Medical Research Council,2017). The daily intake of calories should reflect the body's energy demands to prevent the risks of malnutrition and unnecessary weight gains (Popkin et al., 2013). The total body fat should be at most 30% of the energy intake, and the consumption of saturated fats should not exceed 10% of the total energy intake. The trans-fats intake should be less than 1% of the energy intake (Popkin et al., 2013).
People who lack the necessary micronutrients and vitamins worldwide are about 2 billion (Beaudreault, 2020). The children with low heights compared to their ages are 150.8 million, which translates to one in every four children. Out of this population, 71% live in Southeast Asia and Africa (Beaudreault, 2020). It is further estimated that 9.7% of women between the ages of 20 and 49, and 5.7% of adolescent girls are underweight, and 15.1% are overweight (Beaudreault, 2020). This increases the risk of anaemia for pregnant women by 40.1%. In every three people in the world, one is either obese or underweight. Nutrition is fundamental in ensuring people reach their full potentials (HHS, 2017). Poor nutrition contributes to a high mortality rate and a high cost of care by increasing non-communicable disease risks. Proper nutrition and healthy lifestyles can help reach and maintain healthy weights, reduce the risks of chronic disease, and promote people's overall wellbeing. Diet and lifestyle are directly associated with non-communicable diseases.
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Human health goes beyond the physical fitness or disease absence. Healthy people are efficient at work and in society (Rathnayake et al., 2020). They have longer lifespans and less demand for healthcare services. Good health is defined by eating habits, regular physical activities, and personal hygiene. Comment by fox night: A brief read of this paper reveals that Rathnayake et al., 2020 did not make this claim. The author of this paper states that the Women go through many difficulties after menopause and need health education, How can it improve the quality of life ) Menopause is a major milestone in women(> I don't think that has anything to do with the essay question So this source does not mention this claim, please mention the true source of this sentence or this claim... Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. Comment by fox night: Is it? Says who? This is a very big claim and requires a reference. I am personally unaware of any legitimate scientific body which defines health according to these three criteria. So could you please Reference needed for this.
The basic nutrition has a proper balance of proteins, fats, and carbohydrates and forms the basis of all life activities. The diet makes up functional body molecules, the carbon skeleton, and the energy for driving the body processes (Rajendra et al., 2015, p. 3). Its primary function is to power the body, prevent nutritional deficiencies, and prevent NCDs (Rajendra et al., 2015). It has to be kept at the right balance because too many nutrients in the body result in overweight, while inadequate amounts lead to malnutrition. Fanzo considers diet as the leading factor of most non-communicable morbidity and mortality (2016). Excessive nutrition makes the bodies absorb and store excess energy and fats that are detrimental to health. The intake of healthy diets with high concentration of nutrients are paramount in minimizing the risks of most communicable diseases primarily in the older adults since they are at the highest risks of these diseases (Bruins et al., 2019). It accelerates the body's ability to reproduce, which reduces life quality. The western pattern compromises nutritional integrity and optimal micronutrition for macronutrients, which maximise taste perception. (Rajendra et al., 2015, p.3). Although people get full after eating this food, the body does not benefit because they have little or no dietary value. The ingredients used in preparing these foods are mostly unhealthy for consumption. They have high concentrations of white flour, trans-fats, salt, unrefined sugars, and many food additives like tartrazine that have negative side effects on individual health. Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. Comment by fox night: this sentence or idea came so suddenly that the ideas in the essay do not flow its not logical #How does this have to do with the essay idea or question? You may need to support this claim Comment by fox night: The ideas in this piece are illogical, in the first sentence it was mentioned that the elderly need healthy nutrition, then the second sentence the western style is its relationship to taste, then in the second sentence, then the third sentence about unhealthy food,it doesn’t make sense ? So ,I think that you clearly see that it is not logical, you may take one idea from them and support it with a number of evidence from reliable sources, the ideas must be logically sequenced, each claim must be supported by reliable sources Comment by fox night: also what is meant by * the older adults* do you mean the elderly here? Comment by fox night: IT here refers to whom or what ? Comment by fox night: #What do you mean by to reproduce ? Reproducing what ? What reduces the quality of life? #You need to clarify or explain that more because it is not understood what is meant by this sentence specifically #Reference needed for this. Comment by fox night: The essay question or its idea has no connection with western style or taste? Sorry, but it was suddenly mentioned that the western patten affects taste. How was this related to the research question or its idea in general? Comment by fox night: What do you mean by western patten? Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. Comment by fox night: This here refers to what ?
Our weight depends on the food people eat, the calories we store, and the ones we burn. People who consistently burn calories through regular physical activities maintain their weights (Matera, Bernat & Olejniczak, 2018). Matera and colleagues holds that consuming more calories than the body requires results in fat being stored in the body as fat in specialized fat cells known as adipose (2018). Matera et al. continue to argue that the fats become enlarged, and more of them are created to contain the stored energy (2018). Regular and vigorous physical exercises breakdown the calories from the body's reserves and reduces fat storage. This ends up shrinking the fat cells and reducing body weight. Therefore, a healthy diet is a foundation for preventing weight gain and obesity. This suggests that some diets are healthier than others. Comment by fox night: A brief read of this paper reveals that Matera, Bernat & Olejniczak, 2018., did not make this claim. The author of this paper ) emotional eating is connected to craving chocolate and avoidance of social situations related to food and body exposure that plays only the role of mediation( So , Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim #I ask you please to always check the correct source for any claim you write #Please cite the correct source for each claim you write, and verify it well Comment by fox night: Please cite the correct source for each claim you write, and verify it well A brief read of this paper reveals that Matera, Bernat & Olejniczak, 2018., did not make this claim. The author of this paper ) emotional eating is connected to craving chocolate and avoidance of social situations related to food and body exposure that plays only the role of mediation( So , Reference needed for this. #I ask you please to always check the correct source for any claim you write #Please cite the correct source for each claim you write, and verify it well Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this.
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Time has changed, and our daily lives offer little or no opportunities for physical exercise. Children do not exercise in schools as required because of the shrinkage of physical activity classes by concentrating on academic affairs (Matera, Bernat & Olejniczak, 2018). Research suggests that obese people spend up to four times more watching television and playing video games compared to people with normal body weight (Matera, Bernat & Olejniczak, 2018). Watching television for more than two hours a day has been linked to increased overweight risks in children. Comment by fox night: A brief read of this paper reveals that Matera, Bernat & Olejniczak, 2018., did not make this claim. The author of this paper talk about ) emotional eating is connected to craving chocolate and avoidance of social situations related to food and body exposure that plays only the role of mediation( Nothing is mentioned about children in this source so please verify the correct source for this claim,, make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim So , Reference needed for this. #I ask you please to always check the correct source for any claim you write #Please cite the correct source for each claim you write, and verify it well These claims are interesting, but they are written in informal terms and are not substantiated by evidence. It is vital that you transition away from writing about your own subjective opinions and begin using the evidence base (the best-available peer-reviewed literature) Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this.
Lifestyle and eating habits are critical aspects that influence body weight and diseases. Proper management of these aspects helps regulate the blood sugar levels in the body and minimize the risks of diabetes (Gray & Threlkeld, 2019). Individuals need to create this balance by determining what they eat and how much should be consumed. Vegetables such as corn, green peas, carrots and nuts, and other types of plant-based plants are healthy because they are rich in fibre that helps control the level of blood sugar in the body (Forouhi et al., 2018). Individuals should eat foods with healthy, complex, and simple carbohydrates like whole grains, legumes, and low-fat dairy products (Forouhi et al., 2018). Others include the ‘good’ fats that contain polyunsaturated and monosaturated fats that are crucial in reducing cholesterols' levels. They include nuts, avocadoes, peanut, and olive oils (Forouhi et al., 2018). Comment by fox night: , Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim Comment by fox night: make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim Comment by fox night: A brief read of this paper reveals that Forouhi et al., 2018). ., did not make this claim. The author of this paper did not mention examples of vegetables and did not mention that they help to regulate blood sugar. Also, The writer contains fruit fibers So , Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim #I ask you please to always check the correct source for any claim you write #Please cite the correct source for each claim you write, and verify it well Comment by fox night: brief read of this paper reveals that Forouhi et al., 2018). ., did not make this claim. The author of this paper say ( however, olive oil, particularly extra virgin olive oil, has been studied in greater detail with evidence of potential benefits for the prevention and management of type 2 diabetes29 and the prevention of cardiovascular disease within the context of a Mediterranean diet30 (see article in this series on dietary fats). They did not mentioned that nuts, avocadoes, peanut help lower cholesterol level So , Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim #Again, you must provide evidence for these claims. Claims which are presented without evidence can be dismissed without evidence. #I ask you please to always check the correct source for any claim you write #Please cite the correct source for each claim you write, and verify it well
The best way to check on body weight is by assessing the body mass index. A metric links the weight and height of an individual. On average, the BMI should be below 25 (World Health Organization 2020). A combination of physical exercise and a healthy diet reduces the risks of cancer. This combination builds a healthy defence system for the body and improves the levels of the hormone. Al-Shawi and colleagues suggest that diets like wheat, germ oil, and most nut oils improve the body’s immune system (2019). Excess weight increases the risks of getting various types of cancer. The excess body weight stimulates the excretion and circulation of hormones such as insulin and estrogen, which accelerate cancerous cells' growth. Comment by fox night: #brief read of this paper reveals that(World Health Organization 2020., did not make this claim #so Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim #also This is very highly contested –. As you’ve presented no evidence supporting this claim, I can dismiss it. You must provide evidence for these statements, otherwise they are somewhat meaningless. Comment by fox night: so Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim
Food like unprocessed dairy products, leafy vegetables, and fish like sardines are healthy because they have high levels calcium concentration that reduces cancer risks (Ksouri, 2019). Research suggests that calcium binds fatty acids and bile acids in the gastrointestinal tract (Ksouri, 2019). The binding force protects cells in the digestive system and the growth of cancerous cells. Berries such as acai berries, peanuts, and blueberries contain polyphenols, a class of antioxidants that can reduce cancer risk (Kraak & Story, 2010). They neutralize free radicals that can damage cells of body cells. These foods only prevent and have little healing impacts because, in most cases, cancers develop over decades. Therefore, the foods should be incorporated into the lifetime diet.
Discussion
Healthy eating can prevent excessive weight, which is a leading cause of a range of diseases. Food with high concentration of fats, sugars, and calories are the foundation for overweight in the body (Farhud, 2015). The result is obesity that weakness the body's defence system and because it strains internal organs to work harder. This opens doors for diseases like cancer, diabetes, and cardiovascular diseases, among many others. Certain nutrients have substantial impacts on the body. For example, calcium-rich foods like unprocessed dairy products strengthen the body and reduce the risks of cancer. Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim Comment by fox night: Reference needed for this. make sure that you cite the correct source for this claim
Lifetime dietary and lifestyle measures can significantly reduce the risks of chronic diseases. For example, a balanced diet and regular physical activities have been found to reduce the risks of diabetes by 90% and 80% in heart diseases (Tello, 2020). Tello estimated that a third of the global cancer cases could be prevented by eliminating risk factors that include poor lifestyles and unbalanced diets (2020). A general health recommendation is eating vegetables, fruits, fish, and moderating the amount of starch, sugars, and fats in the diet. Currently, only a small fraction of the global society has healthy eating patterns due to lifestyle choices, healthy food availability, and affordability (Health Research Institute, n.d). Proper eating habits can reduce the global risks of overweight and chronic diseases because some diets are healthier than others. Comment by fox night: Inappropriate source. There is no need to use blogs when the scientific, peer-reviewed literature substantiates claims without dubious writing. In addition, you did not mention it in the list of sources, but there is no need for that because it is not a good source. Therefore, I would like to put a reliable source or change the claim. If you want to change the claim , please make sure that it fits with the topic or idea of the research Comment by fox night: Again Inappropriate source. There is no need to use blogs when the scientific, peer-reviewed literature substantiates claims without dubious writing. In addition, you did not mention it in the list of sources, but there is no need for that because it is not a good source. Therefore, I would like to put a reliable source or change the claim. If you want to change the claim , please make sure that it fits with the topic or idea of the research Comment by fox night: you should mention a clear date of publication. + You did not mention that source in the source list Therefore, you should mention the clear date of publication and mention it in the list of sources or support the claim of another source. Please do not use this in scientific writing. If it has no date of publication, it cannot have been subject to peer-review.
Conclusion
Some diets are healthier than others. The health value of foods is determined by their quality. Caloric value is among the metrics for examining high quality (healthier) foods and low quality (less healthy) foods. Healthy diets are mostly unrefined and are minimally processed. Examples include whole grains, vegetables, fruits, and cereals, among many other farm-foods. Unhealthy diets are of low quality and include highly processed and sweated foods. Examples included refined grains, sugar, beverages, snack foods, and the ones saturated with trans fats. Comment by fox night: Sorry what do you mean by (sweated foods) ? please try to use scientific term Please remember you are writing for an expert audience in this scientific writing, not lay people. So, you must avoid informal and colloquial language.
A healthy lifestyle accompanies the effectiveness of a healthy diet. Food choice goes a long way in determining the body weight and the risk factor of chronic illnesses. Eating patterns have significant impacts in determining the feelings of today's, tomorrows, and future because it influences health outcomes. A combination of the right diet and physical activities can help prevent the risks of a range of health problems like obesity, cancer, and diabetes, among other lifestyle diseases. Obesity is among the scariest health realities that the global community is facing today. It is pandemic, especially to children in urban areas and most developing countries. This condition is stimulated by eating patterns and lifestyles that are parents pass to children and progress to adulthood. The prevalence of obesity creates a health emergency that can be addressed by creating awareness of proper nutrition and lifestyle. Comment by fox night: I don't think I understand what you want to convey here? I mean, what do you want to tell the reader, yes, I see that you are talking about chronic diseases one by one, but what is the point? In other words, I think that this part needs to be reformulated to be suitable as a conclusion, and to be clearly related to the essay question .. I hope to improve this part
Diabetes is another lifestyle disease that can be prevented through lifestyle and dietary changes. The best medicine is hailed a balanced diet with low saturations of fats and sugar. Other nutritional solutions include incorporating fiber-rich foods in the diet and reducing fat consumption. Cancer is another global nightmare that is claiming the lives of our loved ones. One leading cause of this condition is overweight. Dietary and lifestyle solutions for cancer can be realized in the long term, which implies that people should adopt healthy eating patterns from childhood. Most healthy foods do not have healing properties but reduce the risks of developing the disease.
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