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Re: ZJ Paper

Name of the Draft’s Author: ZJ

Name of the Peer Reviewer: Courtney Pluciennik

Summary: After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3–5 sentences) of the paper in the box below.

This paper talks about the importance of labeling patient specimens. This can be extremely dangerous when diagnosing the patient and properly treating them. Failure to do so can lead to other very serious issues not only for the employee but, also for the patient because the outcome could be potentially fatal.

Literature Review Draft

After a second, closer reading of the draft, evaluate the essay using the Literature Review Draft. Determine the level of achievement appropriate for each assignment criteria. (Level of achievement ranges from Unsatisfactory to Excellent and are found at the top of the rubric. Assignment criteria are found in the left column of the rubric.)

Introduction of the Topic

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent

· What evidence do you have for this score?

ZJ included a lot of information and basis of why labeling specimens is so important. She listed all of the serious outcomes that could happen if people failed to do so. She also used research to support these outcomes.

Literature Review in Research

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Fair

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

Although I found the information to relate very well to the topic, there are a fair amount of grammatical errors and repetition of points made.

Ethical Considerations for Data Collection

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Good

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

ZJ did well using research to support this topic but she also incorporated her input on it as well. She gave great examples of requirements to ensure the safety of the patient.

Explanation of What the Data Reveals in Terms of Statistical Analysis

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

Author does a great comparison those who label specimens and those who have failed to do so. She explains the negative effects that can come with not labeling specimens properly and ways to help reduce potential specimen errors effectively.

Evaluation of the Effectiveness of the Specific Study

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

She gives a great example of the effectiveness of the specific study she chooses. She included methods to help detect mislabeling of specimens and how they can have remarkable decreases of the potential specimens errors that could be caught before it happens.

Summary of the Conclusions from Literature Review.

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Good

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

I like the direction ZJ is going with her conclusion it’s just a little too short. I would add in another sentence or two.

Thesis Development and Purpose

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Unsatisfactory

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

I didn’t see a thesis statement stated in the introduction or the conclusion.

Argument Logic and Construction

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

ZJ has an excellent way of expressing why this topic is so important. She includes not only the negative effects it can have but she also includes examples of serious outcomes and methods that should be implemented so that this type of error cant be decreased.

Mechanics of Writing

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Good

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

ZJ showed great mechanics of writing by how she spaced out each topic and went into great detail with research.

Paper Format

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Unsatisfactory

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

Page format is off on some of the pages, grammatical errors were present throughout the paper.

Research Citations

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Good

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

Great job at citing every research quote that you used.

Three positive things about this paper are:

1) Great use of research to support your topic

2) Flow of paper was very easy, kept me interested

3) Great examples used for how this can negatively affect the patient and methods to use in order to prevent it from happening

Three things that could be improved are:

1) Grammatical Errors

2) Repetitive points made

3) Spacing research quotes a bit more instead of having one after another

2nd Peer Review

HLT-317v Peer Review Worksheet

Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. Copy and paste the completed review into your reply to the post containing the assigned draft. Do not post your review as an attachment.

Name of the Draft’s Author: ZJ

Name of the Peer Reviewer: Maithe Valdez

Summary: After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3–5 sentences) of the paper in the box below.

ZJ’s literature review main focus in on the failure to label specimens, through the use of different articles, studies and information helps to support the importance of labeling specimens correctly. Laboratory managers need to apply polies and practices where specimen mislabeling does not happen. Mislabeling can lead to patient’s death and wrong diagnosis. With easy steps specimen errors can be avoided.

Literature Review Draft

Introduction of the Topic

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Level of achievement for Introductions of the Topic is excellent.

· What evidence do you have for this score?

In the introduction the author, states the thesis of the paper. As well the author gives the reason for choosing the topic of “failure to label specimen”. Also, the introduction, gave me interest to keep reading.

Literature Review in Research

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent level of achievement for literature review in research.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

The author in literature review, uses the literature of choice to explain how important it is to label specimen correctly. In depth, the author gives details on the different errors that happen in the laboratory.

Ethical Considerations for Data Collection

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Level of achievement for ethical consideration for data collection is excellent.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

The author states the research from the study has used ethical standards at all time. Researches have full consent of the participants before conducting the study. All of the patient’s information is private.

Explanation of What the Data Reveals in Terms of Statistical Analysis

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Satisfactory score for Explanation of What the Data reveals.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

Even though, the author doesn’t give a lot percentage, the author explains how a article conducted a study with the use of wristbands. Where results showed that 72% of specimen errors was from patients who didn’t use wristbands.

Evaluation of the Effectiveness of the Specific Study

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent level of achievement in Evaluation of the Effectiveness of the specific study.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

The author of the paper uses the article Astion, 2006, to explain how the study uses different methods to detect errors and supports how errors are made.

Summary of the Conclusions from Literature Review.

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Level of achievement is excellent.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score?

Overall, the author summarizes how the literature review gives information on specimen errors contribute to wrong diagnosis.

Thesis Development and Purpose

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Level of achievement for thesis development and purpose is excellent.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

In the introduction, the author clarifies the thesis of the paper and purpose.

Argument Logic and Construction

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Argument Logic and construction level of achievement is excellent.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

Throughout the paper, the author uses the articles to describe the importance and the consequences that happen due to failure to label specimens. In all articles it gives information on how errors are done.

Mechanics of Writing

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Excellent level of achievement for mechanics of writing.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

The tone of the paper is to inform why the failure to label specimen is crucial to patients. Use of articles is used throughout the paper.

Paper Format

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Level of achievement for paper format is excellent.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

The paper is well organized. Indentions and paragraphs are well used. The paper has introduction, a body explain how literature is used, ethical, statistical analysis, and effectiveness of the study.

Research Citations

· What level of achievement did the author score for this criterion?

Citations are excellent.

· What evidence from the paper do you have for this score

Citations are in APA format and in alphabetical order.

Three positive things about this paper are:

1) Very well organized and easy to follow and understand.

2) I like how the author of the paper, uses all the articles to explain the importance of labeling specimen.

3) I also like that you discuss why you pick the subject of “Failure to label specimen”.

Three things that could be improved are:

1) Include title in the beginning of the introduction.

2) Identify how literature review is used for.

3) A lot of space.