You have a good thesis concept on this revision but you must make sure your

You have a good thesis concept on this revision, but you must make sure your actual thesis statement makes your argument clear—that you will argue your three sub-genres of reality TV provide great educational value, despite the commonly-held oppositional opinion that reality TV has no real value and is for entertainment purposes only. 
You will also need to refocus your content in each body paragraph to first provide the characteristics that are true of all shows in each genre and then follow up with examples. Also, make sure your analysis is clear before you give examples that prove the analysis. 
See the rubric and marginal comments for further guidance as you begin writing your essay. Good luck, and please contact the school with any questions. 
Instructor (VGG) Penn Foster