I need help to edit my essay

I want to make my essay become better not just in the grammar, but also at clarity and to be more orgnized. 

you may delet some paragraphs and  write another instead of it. 

feel free to do what is nessecary to make the essay better. 

don't give the grammar the big part because the professor doesn't focuse much on it. 

But the essay should'nt be less than 4 full pages and maximum 5 pages. 

This is the assay prompt:

Define and explain what pop culture is to you. You may use examples from your life, and observation you have made. Please, write a strong essay with a strong thesis and please I don't have time to revise the essay, so write it well. if you have questions please contact me. I want the font to be (Times new Roman)

I uplaoded my essay and some of my professors comment.