ESSAY AND SHORT STORY EDIT.

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yes, i have a short story and an essay. the essay is about the cemetery. I'm done with them.I just need some edits. I have the teacher's feedback. the essay feedback is: your second paragraph contains the thesis statement, but the thesis needs to go at the end of the intro. The thesis is where you are stating what is frightening about cemeteries, which you state in the second paragraph is due to our fear of death. That sounds like your thesis. Also, you need to develop the paragraphs more. Begin with clear topic sentences that state the point of each body paragraph. Then you need to weave some quotations into your writing. Use the quotes to support the points you make in the body paragraphs. Make quote sandwiches by stating the name of the author and text, then give the quote, then explain it.

and for the essay: just some edits to make it perfect.

 

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