Edit my rough draft to my teachers liking - due in 5 hours - Will take around 20 minutes

This entire thing will take around 20-30 minutes to be completed.

Edit the rough draft according to my teachers notes highlighted in red on the side of the page. 

There are 4 small things that are needed to be corrected. 

For comment 7, it is okay to fabriate or make up an interview... As long as the interview makes complete sense and seems realistic.