edit my essay help

hello i have an essay that i wrot and i got feedback from my teacher about it and i need help editing it using the notes that my teacher wrote i want my essay to be in the level of undergradute student it is important for me to pass i uploaded the essay that i wrote and it is about chosing a children book and analyze it through out the essay and the book that i choosed is  "How to make Friends with a Giant by Gennifer Choldenko." and  also the minimum of the essay is six paragraphs and ialso uploaded the instruction guide to help in writing and editing this essay 

edit the essay using the teachers notes and grading paper and the instruction paper