Can you edit the paper you wrote for me couple of weeks ago

The homework (first draft) link:

https://www.homeworkmarket.com/content/could-you-write-response-paper

The comments:

https://www.dropbox.com/s/o8eufomtsyimfl1/Comments.pdf?dl=0

The paper you wrote (first draft) is attached down here. You're gonna need to edit the paper based on the comments that I got from my teacher. Please carefully follow the comments.